A Light in the Darkness

[Rumour]

Name: Elyna

Knowledge:
Location: Burhan Estate
Mia Sayed (NPC): Skyrider
Kesick (NPC): Skyrider
Anabelle (NPC): Skyrider
Tara (NPC): Skyrider
Caelan Burhan (NPC): Forbids you from seeing Malcolm
Stealth: How to sneak a small treat
Stealth: Side rooms and corridors are useful hiding spaces

Loot: N/A
Injuries: N/A
Fame: +5 for hosting an event, +2 for supporting a popular cause (Iron Hand promotions & victory over the Qe’dreki)
Devotion: N/A

Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/5
Structure: 5/5

Comments: Gorgeous description in your posts! Loved the set up of the Burhan house. Your words really brought it to life. I will say that Elyna didn't have a lot of interaction with the characters in this thread, though I do recognize that you had splinter threads as well. What you did include here was lovely to read!

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Name: Malcolm

Knowledge:
Location: Burhan Estate
Benjamin (NPC): Partnered with Belinda
Benjamin (NPC): Infidelity troubles with Belinda
Kathryn (NPC): Partnered with Cora
Cora (NPC): Pastry Chef
Nathan (NPC): Married
Ronald (NPC): Has a sister
Etiquette: Fancy events tend to collect weapons from the attendees to avoid unnecessary violence
Interrogation: Ask pointed questions with a clear end goal
Detection: How to detect a white lie

Loot: N/A
Injuries: N/A
Fame: +1 good deed for not calling Quio out on his obvious lie, +2 for supporting a popular cause (Iron Hand promotions & victory over the Qe’dreki)
Devotion: N/A

Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/5
Structure: 5/5

Comments: Lovely writing, as usual! Great use of NPCs and excellent conversation. I quite liked Malcolm’s interrogation of Quio and his decision not to call him out. That was very kind of him!

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Name: Tristan Venora

Knowledge:
Location: Burhan Estate
Faith: Does not know how to dance
Nir’wei: “Lord” Nir’wei
Nir’wei: Either an eccentric noble or a Krome
Rumour: Faith is a Lady High Priestess who works for the king?
Etiquette: Slaves are meant to walk behind their masters
Etiquette: Fancy events tend to collect weapons from the attendees to avoid unnecessary violence
Appraisal: How to distinguish between shoddy clothes and well-tailored clothes
Dancing: Do not step on your partner’s toes

Loot: N/A
Injuries: N/A
Fame: +1 good deed for inviting Faith to attend the ball with you, +2 for supporting a popular cause (Iron Hand promotions & victory over the Qe’dreki)
Devotion: N/A

Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 3/5
Structure: 5/5

Comments: “I’m not into balls, and with that I mean those where you dance.” LOL So much hilarity in your posts, Tristan. I especially loved that your character was taken in with Nir’wei’s lies and that he took them reasonably seriously. So much fun!

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Name: Faith

Knowledge:
Location: House Burhan
Nir’wei: Alias is “Lord Nir’wei”
Nir’wei: Knows Elyna
Nir’wei: Unskilled dancer
Story: How Nir’wei and Elyna met
Heels: Torture devices
Sewing: How to combine old clothes and new material to create an entirely new outfit
Torture: Put on a pair of heels
Torture: Cinch one’s waist until they can’t breathe

Loot: N/A
Injuries: N/A
Fame: +2 for supporting a popular cause (Iron Hand promotions & victory over the Qe’dreki)
Devotion: N/A

Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/5
Structure: 5/5

Comments: So many lulz in your posts. Faith’s thoughts about tight dresses and high heels are bang on! Poor girl. I also love her secret snark towards Tristan. Lovely work, as usual!

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Name: Nir'wei

Knowledge:
Location: Burhan Estate
Ball: A celebration for busy, high-society citizen
Elyna Burhan: Promoted to Skyrider Captain
Elyna: Faith’s friend
Elyna: Tristan Venora’s friend
Elyna: Noblewoman
Heels: Torture devices
Etiquette: It is best practice to clean yourself up before attending a fancy event
Etiquette: At a fancy event, servants will take your cloak before you enter
Detection: How to detect an air of snobbery
Detection: How to efficiently spot where the food is
Deception: The after-effects of lying about who you are
Deception: Make up false history to heighten your credibility
Storytelling: How to improvise a basic story
Storytelling: Keep it brief
Acting: How to put on a false voice
Acting: Adjust your word choice to match your surroundings

Loot: An assortment of small pastries that will spoil within 3-5 trials.
Injuries: N/A
Fame: -1 for starting a rumour about Faith the “Lady High Priestess,” +2 for supporting a popular cause (Iron Hand promotions & victory over the Qe’dreki)
Devotion: N/A

Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/5
Structure: 5/5

Comments: Oh, I think this is the first thread of yours I’ve reviewed! I love, love, love Nir’s thought process and Archailist’s snarkiness & melodramatic reactions. And Nir'wei is such a little troublemaker. So much fun! I hope to have an opportunity to review more of your threads in future.

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Name: Yanahalqah

Knowledge:
Location: Burhan Estate
Hannes Gudhelth (NPC): Iron Hand Knight
Hannes Gudhelth (NPC): Temporarily reassigned as an assistant combat instructor and drillmaster during Vhalar 716
Rhetoric: How to proclaim your words with confidence
Persuasion: Use examples from past experiences to make a point
Persuasion: State the facts
Deception: A little white lie can help someone else feel better
Etiquette: Fancy events tend to collect weapons from the attendees to avoid unnecessary violence
Strength: How to balance another man’s weight while walking
Strength: How to control a drunkard’s limbs when helping them walk

Loot: N/A
Injuries: N/A
Fame: +2 to your Eidisi form for supporting a popular cause (Iron Hand promotions & victory over the Qe’dreki), +1 good deed to your Eidisi form for helping Hannes get home
Devotion: N/A

Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 3/5
Structure: 5/5

Comments: This is the second ball thread I’ve had the pleasure of reviewing for you, Yana. I’m so glad Hannes is back! He’s a blast and a really fun juxtaposition next to your character. I love their interactions, and I like the secret softness that Yana has towards him despite her denials and tough exterior. I'm convinced she's a marshmallow!

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Name: Quio

Knowledge:
Location: Burhan Estate
Wine: Venora Red
Rynmere Noble Houses: There are seven in total
House Andaris Symbol: Dragon
House Venora Symbol: Rose
House Krome Symbol: Wolf
Persuasion: Continuously repeating your point may help… or it may not
Disguise: Hide behind a false name
Detection: How to notice expressions of uncertainty and suspicion
Deception: Mix truth with lies to sound more believable
Stealth: Side rooms and corridors are useful hiding spaces
Etiquette: Fancy events tend to collect weapons from the attendees to avoid unnecessary violence
Etiquette: At a fancy event, servants will take your cloak before you enter

Loot: N/A
Injuries: N/A
Fame: +2 for supporting a popular cause (Iron Hand promotions & victory over the Qe’dreki)
Devotion: N/A

Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/5
Structure: 5/5

Comments: Oh my god, I love Hart and Quio! Hart’s hilarious, and I really appreciate that Quio goes along with his games despite his own uncertainty. I really enjoyed the trouble that Quio got into in this thread. Well done and well-written!

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Comments: This was wonderful fun to review, all! Thanks to Elyna for hosting this open event and thank you all for participating. Although I know that the big drama was not on this thread, you still managed to find room for small interactions that added a lot to the story and were really enjoyable to read.

A note: Apologies for any duplicate knowledges! I didn’t scroll through everyone’s existing knowledge listing, given the number of players in this thread. If you received a duplicate knowledge, please feel free to disregard.

If you feel I've missed anything or if you have questions about your review, please don't hesitate to send me a quick PM. Thanks!