[Warrick] The Weeping Willow

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[Warrick] The Weeping Willow

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This was nice, holding Theodore's hand was nice. Lazuli smiled as she looked up at the clouds, her chest still felt tight where he had held his arms around her. She had slipped into a daydream as the man at her left stirred, while the two of them lay hidden in the tall grass side by side catching their breath, and kissed her. Lazuli held her breath as a strange heat spread through her like a quick moving poison, a sensation unlike any she had ever experienced. Her mind raced, trying to draw connections to something that might have felt akin to this, anger, embarrassment, fear? The kiss had caused her heart rate to slow considerably, and her lack of panic scared her more than anything. What would Isabel say, what would they all say about her when Theodore returned home to brag?
For a moment she let an uneasy silence settle between them, not knowing what to say to the boy. Lazuli had stolen her hand away from Theodore's quickly, and wondered what that strange drumming in her ears was. Her heart? The guards coming to fetch her? Distant thunder? Everything was a blur of confused emotions, new sensations, and concern, above all else, she was concerned that he would tell of how easy it was to steal a kiss from the Lion's Lamb. With lightly furrowed brow she turned to look at Theodore and sat up, glancing about the field only to find that they were indeed alone. It was then she leaned in, like a child bowing to smell a rose, and pressed her lips to Theodore's. The kiss was brief, but invoked the same response it had the first time, leaving her warm and tingling, almost painfully so.
"You have to go now," she spoke in a whisper and got to her feet quickly, too fast for Theodore to react or attempt to follow her, and ran towards the house. Their time together was done.
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[Warrick] The Weeping Willow

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Lazuli


Points!:

Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/ 5
Structure: 5/ 5
Knowledge:

Politics: You are never truly alone
Etiquette: A very delicate balancing act
Etiquette: Outfits must match the occassion
Animal Husbandry: Dragons: Don't look them in the eye
Animal Husbandry: Looking at the leg of a beast can make them feel like you're a predator, looking in the eye is challenging
Mount: Jacadon Riding: Techniques for getting on
Hector: Friend of your father
Hector: Jacadon called Fray
Teddy Venora: Watching his figure
Teddy Venora: Went to public school
Teddy Venora: Prone to making observations
Teddy Venora: One step forward, two steps back
Teddy Venora: What a contrary fellow
Teddy Venora: Laughs in the face of an insult (though it might have been you falling that did it)
Teddy Venora: Oh, he's good with words.
Teddy Venora: Oh, he's good with kisses too!
Teddy Venora: You kissed him after he kissed you
Tristan: Someone to do with Teddy
Jacadon Rider!

Loot:
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Fame:
NA
Magic:
These points may NOT be used for arcana
Teddy


Points!:

Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/ 5
Structure: 5/ 5
Knowledge:

Etiquette: Don't laugh when a lady falls over
Etiquette: Fake it till you make it.
Seduction: You were born to do this, you silver-tongued devil.
Animal Husbandry: Dragons: Don't look them in the eye
Animal Husbandry: Looking at the leg of a beast can make them feel like you're a predator, looking in the eye is challenging
Mount: Jacadon Riding: Techniques for getting on
Hector: Friend of Lazuli's father
Hector: Jacadon called Fray
Location: Lazuli's garden
Lazuli: Went to public school
Lazuli: Thinks you are much too forward
Lazuli: Has a temper there.
Lazuli: Thinks you are an arrogant, proud, conceited, egocentric, patronising, boy
Lazuli: Grandfather called her lamb
Lazuli: It might, just might, be better for your relationship if you don't call her lamb again. You will though, won't you?
Lazuli: Looks good in armour
Lazuli: Rode a Jacadon with you
Lazuli: You kissed her!
Lazuli: Then she kissed you right back
Jacadon Rider!


Loot:
NA
Fame:
NA
Magic:
These points may NOT be used for arcana

Overview:

General comments. I absolutely love reviewing, and threads like this are the reason why! Such a lot of character development and story and emotion wrapped up in eleven posts. This was a wondeful thread to read and I got lost in the reading of it a number of times.
Story A truly lovely story with every word finely crafted. I loved it, it was great!
Structure No issues here all good.

Please do PM me if you think I've missed anything or you have any questions!
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