• Solo • Leaving the Warren

Clara begins her journey alone.

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Leaving the Warren


Leaving the Warren

Arc 722, 7 Ashan
Scalvoris Town

There’s a time in everyone’s lives, where things just take a different turn. For Clara, this was the time. Even though she had been the one to even suggest it to her parents, it was still not real to her. She was going to leave her parent’s house and live on her own. Everything was ready for the move. She had the key to her new house on her right hand, her walking stick on the left and she had already said her goodbyes to her family. All she had to do was to take that one step that would start everything. The step past her parent’s door.

She was slightly afraid of the whole situation. She had promised her parents and herself that she would visit them at least once every five trials, but this feeling was still overwhelming to her. The warm air, but still colder than supposed to for this time of the cycle, hit her face straight on through the open door, making her whiskers float gently. The sun was shining bright outside as if welcoming her into the street. She smiled and nodded. “It’s time” She said without facing her parents waiting behind her, tears streaming down both from her and her mother’s face, while her father’s were a bit more clingy but still kept themselves ready to fall. She took the step outside her house courageously, looking forward with a determined but slightly sad look. This meant that she would start living alone. This meant that she would have to work for her needs. This meant that she could start to work on her dream of having her own studio. This step meant everything to her… and she missed it.

Her face changed from her courageous expression to one of fear as she placed her foot over nothing. She had forgotten about the two steps stair outside of her parent’s house and started to fall forward, face first into the street. She had just enough time to use her own hands to break the fall enough to not cause a violent injury, but still hard enough for a big ‘thud’ sound to alert those in the street. Everyone around turned as Clara quickly made an effort to get up before anyone could realise what happened. Her face was bright red with embarrassment and her green dress now had some specks of brown and grey on the front. She could hear many laughs from those that indeed had realised what happened, but one in particular caught her interest. Next to a side alley was a man, about five feet seven inches tall with a dark brown beard and long dark brown hair, but starting to whiten, hair, wearing a simple brown suit and laughing his ass off as he pointed to her. She smiled, still bright red on her face.

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“HaHaHaHa” The man laughed as he approached her. “You should have seen that from where I was standing. That was hilarious.”

Clara looked around. Everyone was laughing which made her cheeks heat up even more. “Chorum…” She said to the man. “Please stop. You’re embarrassing me. Why are you even here?”

“Your father told me what was going on.” He said as he nodded towards Clara’s father standing next to the door while her mother grabbed his arm, preventing him from running to his daughter. “That’s alright Michal, she’s alright.” Clara looked towards her parents as Chorum’s words reached her father, calming him. He took a deep breath and nodded, showing a slight smile. “You know…” continued Chorum, turning back to her and attempting to clear some dirt from her dress. “You could have told me you were going to move… I would have prepared a gift for you.”

“I know you would have…” responded Clara while smiling towards Chorum “But I wanted to get settled in first before telling anyone. Has my father told anyone else?” She looked towards her father as Chorum finished cleaning her dress. It was slightly better than before.

“I made sure he wouldn’t, right Michal?” he said, turning to Michal and receiving a single nod as a response. “I knew you would want to be the one to tell them. Now, shall we?” he asked as he extended his left hand towards her, a signal she was already very familiar with. She had known this man ever since she came to Scalvoris town, and due to a joke about her wanting to become his wife so that he would not be sad anymore, they would often jokingly hold hands and walk together.

Smiling, she took the hint and held his left hand after placing her keys in the small pouch on her belt. She was shorter than him, but they were already used to the weight difference. “Of course Chorum… but where are we going? I really need to get to my new home.”

Chorum nodded. “And that’s exactly where we are going. Just let this old man here do this one thing alright?"

Clara nodded and began walking towards her new home, the bells on her walking stick jingling slightly. He looked happy. Slightly malnourished and dirty but still… happy. She had no idea why, but she felt best not to question him. At least not during this moment. They spoke as they walked. Of the old times, of the trials to come, of the current cycle… Of everything that came to mind. They even spoke about potential suitors for Clara, something that brought back the red to her furry cheeks.

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“Really Chorum, please stop that. I’ve had enough embarrassment for today.” She laughed and Chorum laughed with her. The happiness didn’t stand around much though as both Chorum and Clara suddenly stopped and turned towards a very specific shop… Vibrancy Jewels. Clara was so happy and distracted that she didn’t even realise that Chorum was taking her to this place. Worried, she looked at him as he stared blankly into the store, his right hand moving while tucked away in a belt pouch. “Are you alright? I’m sorry. I didn’t even notice we were here…”

“I’m fine.” He exclaimed. “It has been many arcs now. This place doesn’t scare me anymore.” His voice was calm and collected and Clara understood he was telling the truth. Ever since he had sold everything he had to buy a ring for the woman he loved only to see her with another man the following week, this shop had terrified him. Now however, it seemed as if he had finally come to terms with it. “I just wanted you to see it for yourself…”

“Aren’t you going to sell it?” Clara asked, looking towards his right hand as he took the ring from the pouch. “They will probably accept it and maybe that way you could get back to your old life.”

Chorum laughed, surprising Clara. “Old life? You mean when I just painted whatever came to mind and then proceeded to spend all the money I got on gambling and drinking with no regard for myself or others? This ring was the best thing that ever happened to me. With it, I found people I actually care about, and that’s exactly why I would never sell it.” He said while staring at the ring.

Clara smiled and stared at the ring as well for a moment. A beautiful yellow colored ring with a bright red stone atop it. They both stared at it for a moment before Chorum placed it back in his pouch, forcefully removing Clara’s concentration on it. She looked at Chorum as Chorum looked back towards her, and after a simple nod between them, they continued their journey towards her new home, a bit more silent than before but still talking about various issues from time to time.

After a moment, Clara stopped, petrified. In front of her was the place that she had chosen as her new home. Chorum had managed to take her mind out of the whole issue up until this point, but now that she was here, everything was going through her head. The fear of not being with her family. The fear of not being able to do this after all. Everything.

“A bit overwhelming isn’t it?” Said Chorum, smiling towards her. “I knew this would happen, so I’ve been trying to keep your mind out of it this entire time. I guess not even I could do anything now that you’re seeing the place.” Clara nodded as Chorum gently let go of her and placed his left hand on her head. “Go on now, it’s time for you to start your new life.”

Chorum took a step backwards while Clara stood there, silently watching the entrance. She had come here previously with her parents in order to see the house and make the deal, but now that she was going there alone, she couldn't help it but just stare at it. After a moment, she looked back towards Chorum, tears falling from her face. “Thank you… For everything.” Chorum nodded and Clara faced forward again, took a deep breath and walked through the doorway into her new life. Chorum however, stood there for a little bit longer, watching the entrance. He took the ring out from his pouch again and just held it close to his chest. “No, thank you… For saving my life.” He said before placing the ring back in the belt pouch and walking away, smiling.

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Optional Consequence: Clara moving into her new home hasn’t gone unnoticed. A little after her arrival a human couple knocks on her door. They welcome her to the neighborhood and want to know if there is anything that they can do for her. They still remember what it is like to be young and live alone for the first time. The woman also brings Clara some stew and bread that she just made, for an impromptu housewarming celebration.

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Comments: This was an adorable thread!

You described Clara’s feelings as she was about to leave her parents’ house and live in her own house very well. She was understandably nervous – this is a big step for a young person – but also very brave. My heart really went out to her when she forgot all about the stairs outside her parents’ house and proceeded to land face first on the ground – and the people watching her had nothing better to do than laugh at her misfortune!

The story didn’t continue quite the way I expected it to. Chorum didn’t seem as mean as I thought he would be at first. In fact, he was acquainted with her and her family and helped her. I like that. The way they talked and laughed together was really heart-warming.

Chorum was a well-realized NPC. I like that you gave him an interesting backstory. It wasn’t just tragic – there was actually something good about the incident with the ring. Hopefully, he’ll find a new love sometime though, a woman that doesn’t cheat on him with another man!

With that being said, I look forward to reading about Clara’s new life!

Enjoy your rewards!

P.S.: You didn’t list the skills you used in the review request. You used “Discipline” when Clara left her parents’ home even though she was afraid, “Athletics” when she broke her fall, and “Detection” when she noticed Chorum among the people laughing at her, for example.

P.P.S.: You can also find the XP for this thread in your UCP!
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