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Zafir re-enters the Ellune community.

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Zafir
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A Broken Promise

Ymiden 1st, 718: Early Morning
The last time he arrived this early in Ne'haer, Zafir had been driven by a cause. Possessed by it. He was energetic, unyielding, consumed by the knowledge that if he did nothing his people might die. Now, however, he had to force his body forward off the boat and onto the city's docks. It wasn't exhaustion that slowed his movements, and it wasn't the heat that had eroded his will. His resistance came from his reason for entering the city. His last visit he had come representing his adopted people, the Yurrovans. On this morning, he came to reconnect with his blood. His family and his race; the Ellune of Oscillette.

He had not made this decision lightly. Eight arcs ago he had left his people's place of refuge with his brother. Eight arcs ago his brother had been lost to the mines, dragged down by some creature and swallowed by the darkness. Eight arcs ago he had made a promise to his brother that he would find him, no matter what it took, and that he wouldn't return to Oscillette until he brought Mirri back with him. For all those years he searched the underground of Yurrova. He exiled himself from his people and his home, finding another in the process of keeping his promise.

A promise that he had to break today.

His feet took him towards the cobalt-colored walls of his city. Zafir didn't even have to think, he had walked these roads often as a child. Never alone, though. Not like he was this trial. He was always nipping at his brother's heels, trying to catch his twin's attention and approval. Mirri was a favorite among their community. Everything that a Treid-fearing Ellune should be. Everything that Zafir couldn't be. He never resented Mirri for that. He deserved the adoration of his people, his parents.

He deserved better than to die screaming in the dark.

He was dead. Zafir didn't have proof, he brought no body back with him, but the Ellune had finally accepted it. After seeing so many corpses last Cycle, so many young faces drained of color and of life, Zafir couldn't deny it anymore. His eight-arc stubbornness had been broken by the blank stares of dead men. Dead boys. He needed to tell his family. He needed to be with his people.

So he had hopped on the closest trading barge, worked his way down the river, and arrived at Ne'haer just in time for the start of the new month. The work did little to numb his pain, working below deck to avoid the encroaching heat, but Zafir pushed through all the same. Just as he pushed through his grief now, letting his feet carry him until he stood before the towering doors of Oscillette. Standing there, he couldn't help but feel a traitor to his blood.

He would have turned around and left, had a voice not called down from the wall. Heartbeat hammering in his eardrums, Zafir didn't hear what the stranger said. He found his tongue had frozen in his mouth. Fear gripped his very core, chilling the man's cold blood more than he thought possible for a being with ice for veins. He should run. It wasn't to late to leave. He could get back on the boat and pretend like he never enter this Immortal's-damned city. By Treid, he wanted to run. Needed to run.

His feet refused to move. His body was in rebellion, determined to deliver his mind to the only people that could help him. Unable to speak or run, Zafir turned his head upward so that he might be seen by the curious watcher on the wall. He raised Sar'Vanis, his family's ancestral War Pick to the sky. A sound of disbelief from above, and that was all the identification Zafir needed.

Sounds of shouting, the movement of feet, and the door opened. A small crowd of Ellune stood before him, shocked faces staring in awe at a man they thought dead. They reached out to him, and he to them. He found his voice.

"Where are my parents? I have news of Mirri." His voice was dry, dark like the coal he pulled from the earth. The Ellune around him shared concerned glances. They shook their heads. One spoke up.

"Gone. 3 arcs ago. They thought both their sons were dead, and they couldn't stand the thought of living in this city anymore. They didn't say where they were going. Just that, 'there was nothing left for them'." The Ellune paused for a moment, reaching his hand out to comfort Zafir. "I'm sorry."

More missing family. He was the only Sar'Vanis left in all of Ne'haer. His shoulder's began to shake. Silver-shedding tears streaked down his cheeks. A moan sounding like a death-rattle tore out of him. The dam had burst, and eight arcs of grief came pouring forth. He had no family left. There was no family here. His knees threatened to collapse underneath him. He turned to leave.

"Zafir, what happened to Mirri?" A regal voice rang out from behind the crowd of Ellune, stopping him where he stood. He knew this voice well, everyone of his people who resided in these walls did. The crowd parted as the man approached.

The Ice King of the West had entered the courtyard. Baelam Sheulai qalar-Treid, owner of Oscillette and ruler of the Ne'haeren Ellune.
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Among the Ellune, Baelam was not a man one would expect to rule them. Cold and reserved, even by their kind's standards, he seemed more fit for bookkeeping than leadership. Still, his voice stopped Zafir where he stood. It was a voice that had often chastised the Ellune in his youth, but now was edged with as much sympathy and concern as the cursed man could manage.

Zafir turned, meeting the Ellune's eyes only briefly. He couldn't manage anything longer, he could feel his shame bubble within him with every glance he shared with his people. He was not the twin they wanted back, he knew that. Zafir didn't even want himself back. If he had a choice, he would trade his life for Mirri's every time. Mirri was an Ellune that would have made a difference in their community. Lead them to something better, not run from them in order to escape consequence. Because without bringing Mirri home, that was all that Zafir had done all these arcs. Run and hide. Just like how he had done in the tunnel.

"We-we wanted to prove that we weren't kids anymore," his voice stumbled at first, he having to force the words to form from his resistant lips. He couldn't run from what happened anymore, and if he wasn't able to bring Mirri home, the least he would do was tell his story. His people needed to know, so that they could hate him as much as he knew he deserved. This was penance. "We grabbed my family's pick, and he worked our way on a boat to Yurrova. We thought that if we found a valuable enough gem, we could start taking on more responsibility. Become men-." His breath caught in his throat. He raised a shaking hand to his neck as he considered what happened next. Zafir was new to this, being overcome by emotion. He usually was adept at keeping up a strong front, but there was no point to holding onto walls here. Here, he had to to be open. He needed to bare his heart so they could rip it out all the easier.

"We wanted to become men. So we entered an abandoned mine shaft and delved deeper than we ever had before. Delved deeper than we should have. We didn't, however, find any gems. No jewels were down there to take, just monsters to take us. I don't know what it was, but it came fast and took Mirri away before I could react. That thing shoved me away, and the cave began to collapse."

He was crying now. He was panicked, frantic. He had buried this memory for so long, and now it burned in the light of day. "I ran. I ran instead of saving my brother. I'm as much as a monster as that thing down there! I ran for eight arcs because I couldn't bear to return without Mirri!" He dropped to the ground, his pick clattering beside him. Fists pounding into the earth, Zafir could barely contain his self-disgust. How could he do that to his family, his brother?! Just run instead of fighting with him. Dying with him if necessary. That was what a true Ellune would have. Though Zafir knew now he was no true Ellune. Not after today.

A hand rested on his shoulder. Its gold ring told him that it was Baelam, but Zafir was confused. Why didn't they hate him? Why wouldn't they punish him?

Another hand joined the first. Then another, and another until his body was surrounded by the Ellune. He couldn't understand this. How could they forgive him so easily?! He was a monster!

As if reading his mind, Baelam stopped Zafir with a glance. He grabbed the younger Ellune's chin, and forced him to meet his eyes. Leaning down the ruler was now at eye level of the miner. "Stop that. This is not your fault. Mirri chose to go down that tunnel with you, and had he survived and you perished he would have never forgiven yourself. You have made yourself suffer enough."

Zafir didn't believe the man at first, but the murmurs of agreement from the other Ellune began to convince him otherwise. They ran their hands over Zafir's shaking body, offering gentle comfort and soft touches to soothe his warring soul. He didn't know how long he knelt there, surrounded by his people. The murmurs eventually changed form into a prayer, and all the Ellune offered up their pleas to Treid to watch over Mirri with care. Again, tears began to sting the edges of Zafir's eyes, but not out of sadness. His brother was cared for, if not by their slumbering Immortal, than by the constant eyes of the Ellune staring up.

His self-hate beginning to leave him, he looked around at his fellow Ellune with as much as a smile as he could muster. He may not have had any blood left in Ne'haer, but he did have a family.

"Welcome home, Zafir." Baelam helped the young Ellune back onto his unsteady feet. He grasped the other man's wrist in an oath. "We promise you, we are not going anywhere."
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Zafir Sar’Vanis dina-qualar-Triedhart
Knowledges
Discipline: Listening to authority
Endurance: Forcing your body to obey
Endurance: Surviving emotional pain
Endurance: Finding inner strength
Mining: The consequences of over-confidence
Mining: Monsters may lurk

Baelam Sheulai qalar-Treid: Owner of Oscillette
Oscillette: Ellunian Refuge in Ne'haer
Sar'Vanis: Iconic weapon of the Sar'Vanis family
Sar"Vanis Family: Zafir is the last left in Ne'haer

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Renown: 5 - for garnering the attention of his people with his return and subsequent heartbreaking news

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This was a really nice commentary on self-inflicted suffering and the influence of other people in the healing process. I haven't read any of your other threads, so I was pleased to see that your writing is both easy to read and interesting: good mix of word choices, balance between thought and action, and, in this thread in particular, a solid build up with a soft anti-climax at the end where his people chose to offer the forgiveness he'd been unable to extend to himself. It was well written, and I definitely look forward to more of your threads!
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