Only YOU Can Prevent Spontaneous Combustion!

A small island with an active volcano, Faldrass is the home to Saoire's school and to the Faldrass Induk.

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She took his hand, and he noted the difference in temperature between the girl and him. He’d heard his share of propaganda and vitriol about the Aukari people in his time. That they were a race of spies and slaves, subject to the evil Immortal Faldrun. That their tears were as lava, and their blood even hotter than the surface of the suns. Woe didn’t know how much of that was true, but he saw the girl crying, and her tears while hot didn’t burn like lava when she slipped her hand into his. So he ascribed much of those rumors to racial animus.

“Don’t be.” When she apologized, he shook his head, “It’s important to let your emotions vent from time to time. And it’s not silly.” Woe was silent a few more trills, until they’d found the path again. The boys were mostly quiet behind them, as was Botany, as they walked along. “Controlling your emotions is difficult if you try to take a hard rein to them. It’s easier to see them as a negotiation of sorts, with changes in flow and back and forth. Always a negotiation. Don’t fight your emotions, be clear with yourself about how you feel. Let emotions run through and out of you, and you will still be there when they run their course.”

Woe had a lot of experience in emotional manipulation in his time, as a former Empath. But that wasn’t something the girl needed to know about. She’d either take his advice or leave it. That was her purview.

“I was.” Woe said, when asked if he’d been a slave. He debated with himself a few moments, whether to tell her more. In the end, he decided to give her a little more than that. “My master was unconventional. A cruel man certainly, but strange. He granted my freedom, thinking I’d be more useful with a longer leash, and that he’d beaten obedience into me.”

Woe said no more of it than that.

He did listen to her story, about how she was kidnapped by a group. Then he listened to more about her nature as an aukari, and was surprised that some things he’d heard were true afterall. Yet he squeezed her hand reassuringly as she concluded. Then she asked him if she’d chosen well.

“You chose to step up to a responsibility greater than you were obliged to. Saoire in her wisdom saw that you were yet young and not ready for such a responsibility, but rewarded your earnest desire to help.” Woe sighed, as they arrived at the gates of the Manor. He saw the gates ahead, along with the guards. Then he looked down to Alyssia, and reached into his domain bag. He retrieved an Echo Scroll. “Here, I want you to have this one. I share them with people I wish to keep in contact with. It’s an echo scroll.”

“If you ever have need to let out your emotions and frustrations, and need someone to tell, lest you burst, write to me. I promise to respond promptly if I can.” Woe handed her the scroll in its case. “It will ring lightly when I send you a message, as will my own scroll should you write me.”

“Farewell, Alyssia.” He said, as the guards waited to escort her into the manor. “Remember the scroll!”

So saying, he walked off with his sons, and his dog, back towards Hopetoun.

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Name: Woe

Points awarded: 15

Knowledge:
None requested

Skill Review: Appropriate to level.

Name: Alyssia

Points awarded: 15

Knowledge:
Socialization - greeting an old friend
Socialization - learning more about one another
Discipline - trying to force your emotions down
Discipline - allowing yourself to feel in the safety of who you trust
Animal Husbandry- very carefully reach out a hand to an unknown animal
Animal Training- calling your pet back to calm them
Storytelling - the story of the fall of the late baron smooglenuff



Skill Review: Appropriate to level.

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Hello, hello! I've always been curious about this thread between Woe and Alyssia, so I was happy to see it pop up for review. Let's get into it, shall we?

Woe is a complex dude. I've always found it interesting that he is so much different with children than with the adults in and around his life. He affords Alyssia the opportunity to speak her troubles and gives her reassurance and some advice. It's a wonderful little scene between the two of them with some wonderful displays of emotion from both. Further, with Woe, extra tricky to balance emotion as he always comes off as someone who would rather not be tangled up in emotions, but can't help it with certain people, like Alyssia.

Alyssia is still questioning herself and who she is, and its all so wonderfully written. It feels like she needed someone to unload all her fears on, and Woe is there for her, making her feel safe. Great relationship - great writing!

Alyssia - a few things. Did you mean to ask for less knowledge? My count is you earned 10 knowledge and you requested 9. If you'd like to pick another, let me know!

As well, there are two knowledges that I'm unsure of:
Socialization - finding comfort in someone
Storytelling - sharing the pain of the past and fear of the future

The socialization knowledge is very vague. As it's written, it's not socialization, and I don't want to assume what you were striving for there. Could you revamp and pm me an updated version? As well, the second one, I *think* I know what you were going for, but you are straddling two different skills. Storytelling would be something to do with the skill of telling a story, and perhaps psychology with the sharing and opening up of past pain and future fear. Again, I didn't want to assume what you were going for so if you could redo that one as well, that would be amazing! Just toss it in my pm and I'll amend the review!

Great job to both of you!



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