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A toast between friends [Blacksmith's Arms]

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Another rejection. It stung. It stung because she had made her choice and she had chosen him. She had chosen to love him and accept all the pain that came with acceptance. Elyna couldn’t stand the half-life they’d existed within for so long. Funny really, she thought, that all it had taken was a quiet moment of peace. Amidst all the potential demands on their attention their quiet sway to the music had been enough. They hadn’t danced for anyone else, Elsie hadn’t been present and the rest of the world had slipped away. As though a pane of glass shattered within the Skyrider could feel the difference within. The sudden rush of thoughts that saw her draw in a deep breath of cold air.
“Go back to Vanessa’s house, with you and Ava?” She spoke without thinking before biting her tongue. Head bowed a little she lifted her thumbs, easing them beneath the shirt and touched them to the bare skin beneath. The young woman shook her head. No it wasn’t really an offer to spend the night with him. Yet it wasn’t his fault. This was a test. Elyna recognised the distance between them and the damage that time had caused. It didn’t help that her body burned with unspent passion, lit again from embers that had been smouldering for too long. His reply however, hadn’t been intended to wound and she needed to set aside her pride and disappointment. It was time to step up to her new command as Captain and the responsibilities of being a parent. Time to stop punishing Malcolm for the circumstances that he could not help.
“I’m sorry,” she admitted, “I was unfair.” The Skyrider let her hands drop from his skin and looked up at the tall man. Leaning back to do so. She struggled to contain the disappointment on her features and instead offered him a smile, “You’re right. You have an early start in the morning. Travel safe, Mal.” Somewhere deep inside she was cursing him for being sensible. Yet it was one reason that she loved him in turn. It made his rare decisions to follow her reckless abandon all the more exciting and meaningful. The young woman would be in control of her own balance and she would seek help when it was needed and above all, she would trust that this rejection was merely what it was and it didn’t mean that he was through. It was hard though. She leant forward to press a kiss to his cheek.
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A toast between friends [Blacksmith's Arms]

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Elyna


Points!:

Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/ 5
Structure: 5/ 5
Knowledge:

Teaching: Passing on simple techniques.
Endurance: Training in the cold.
Business Management: Go where the prospective clients are
Dancing: Group dances
Dancing: Star and circle
Dancing: Slow spin
Dancing: Slow dancing
Liam: Creepy
Liam: You lost a bet to him six arcs ago
Liam: Good memory
Warrick: Bandit Activity Has Increased (Faction VII)
Faction VII: Between 3 and 4 thousand in numbers
Qe'dreki: Between 3 and 4 thousand in numbers


Loot:
NA
Fame:
+ 1 (general good deed: checking doors)
Magic:
These points may NOT be used for arcana
Malcolm


Points!:

Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/ 5
Structure: 5/ 5
Knowledge:

Logistics: Preparation for a journey
Logistics: Will lose troops to hunger in the mountains in winter
Logistics: Sharing territory puts an additional strain on resources
Teaching: If it doesn't challenge, it won't change.
Discipline: Duty first
Dancing: Cutting in
Dancing: Slow dancing
Warrick: Bandit Activity Has Increased (Faction VII)
Faction VII: Between 3 and 4 thousand in numbers
Qe'dreki: Between 3 and 4 thousand in numbers

Loot:
Losses: 1 horse. Gains: 100gn (twice the cost of the horse, I believe. Let me know if I'm looking at the wrong thing in your ledger)
Fame:
+10 (selling horse as per Ryn Vhalar Events)
Magic:
These points may NOT be used for arcana

Overview:

General comments. As always a beautiful, poignant, emotional story of real love facing very real challenges. They are so very sweet together and one of the things that I really love about how you both write them is that, whilst you write the NPCs beautifully and they are rich and detailed, to Malcolm and Elyna, they almost fade into the background because you have a sense of two people who see only each other. I thought that the group dance was a very lovely analogy for that ~ surrounded by others, seeing on each other.
Story Lovely, sweet, melancholy, hopeful. Loved it!
Structure No worries at all

Please do PM me if you think I've missed anything or you have any questions!
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