Vitam Efferare
Posted: Sat Jun 17, 2017 12:09 pm
Mal
Points!:
Story: 2/5 ~ story was abandoned
Collaboration: 5/ 5
Structure: NA ~ story was abandoned
Knowledge:
Alexa: Favored of Karem
Detection: Spotting prey from the sky
Flight: Diving in a hunt
Persuasion: Clearly stating your case
Persuasion: Not holding back
Persuasion: Stating negatively to dissuade
Tactics: Maintain a hidden advantage
Tactics: Trust. Just, not too much
Loot:
Fame:
Devotion:
Magic:
Alexa
Points!:
Story: 2/5 ~ story was abandoned
Collaboration: 5/ 5
Structure: NA ~ story was abandoned
Knowledge:
Animal Training: Verbal commands should be single word
Animal Training: Reward with food to reinforce behaviour
Animal Husbandry: Wolf: Signs of submission
Animal Husbandry: Wolf: How to maintain control
Interrogation: Direct Questions to elicit clear responses
Interrogation: Made easier in a position of power
Mal: A Becomer
Mal: Submissive to you
Mal: Will initiate you
Medicine: Amputating toes
Loot:
Fame:
Devotion:
Magic:
Overview:
Story A shame the story didn't get finished. What you had written was a pleasure to read and very nicely done; good pace etc. I'm sorry that you didn't get more points but the peer review guide is clear. I loved the way you portrayed relationships between the pcs, it was great to see. Lovely writing, I'm sorry I couldn't give you more rewards.
Structure No worries, lovely writing. Unfortunately, I can't award structure points as the thread is abandoned.
Please do PM me if you think I've missed anything or you have any questions!