Fantasy RPG Forum - Standing Trials

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I like the eating of micro organism and the toxic bacteria spit thing you've got going on with them.

I don't have any suggestions at the moment but I did find a few mistakes.

When they eat material either than micro-organisms from water they defecate a foul smelling odor that can even kill nearby plant life.
you mean "other" right?

Due to their rare ability of thriving off of micro-organisms they can purify water to be crystal clear and free of contaminates.
added the "to".

The Scaltrus scales on top of it's head is known to be stronger than steel and provides ample protection.
"is" should probably be "are"

Fixed! thank you for the review and help in grammar. Wrote this one particularly fast. Sloppy work, sorry about that!

no need for apologies

Lapis, you need to capitalize the "no" in "no need for apologies"

No, seriously now, in the previously mentioned "Due their rare ability of thriving off of micro-organisms they can purify water to be crystal clear and free of contaminates." - it is contaminants, not contaminates.

Then, "Hallucination" does not seem to really be the power in effect, as far as making someone forget they saw this creature.

I think a sort of instinctive Hypnosis is more like it.

Where you say: "If someone looks into their eyes they will hallucinate and act as if they never saw the scaltrus, and be led away from their habitat from hallucination, and forget that anything had happened." maybe change to something like:
"The creature's eyes possess a hypnotic quality that causes any that looks directly into them to fall into a semi-comatose state, which allows the creature to leave the area, and makes the victim forget what it was he saw."
This strikes me as being a little less OP, requiring the creature to also make a concession, by leaving the area. I don't want the critter to be quite so invulnerable in the security of its den. We DO want folks to find them from time to time.

That actually seems to work a lot better! Thank you, and I will make the necessary changes!

History and minor changes added.