The Coverup

[Hina]

I am quitting standing trials. It is clear that nobody here wants to rp with me nor do I think I will be missed in the slightest.

If you are a newbie, you should know that mods and even other players can ruin your character at any time and for any power trippy reason. In my time here, I have had mods simply not reply to my posts for weeks and weeks at a time, had my character waste half a season because a mod made up a rule to have my character thrown in jail, been made pregnant against my will, and also been assigned penalties against my will just because a non mod thought to give me a hard time. You can do a bit of research and find that only staff members have accomplished anything noteworthy in this game, because they are the only ones immune from random bullshit.

I would not reccomend this game to anyone looking to accomplish anything in a roleplaying game.

[Strange]

Thread Review

Hina

Hina

Skill Points: +10 (cannot be used for magic)
Magic XP: None

Renown: None

Injuries/Overstepping: None
Wealth Points: None
Loot: None

Skill Knowledges:

• Deception: Covering up a lie
• Deception: Misleading an investigator
• Deception: Trying to keep a story straight
• Deception: Lying is a lot harder than it sounds
• Meditation: Lying takes a mental toll
• Hunting: Following footprints

Non-Skill Knowledges:

• none requested.

Notes: n/a.

Amusing to see Hina take the knight on a zig-zag nonsensical path. It seems like she cares about Berry a lot.

As a suggestion, it would have been nice to see a lot of this written out. Many of the "scenes" are basic summaries of what happened rather than an actual narrative of a story. It reads like an outline. In example: "Hina was questioned further and Hina accidentally let slip that she had talked to the criminal and then she got roped into saying that they had talked about how much his life was ruined."

It could have been a lot more immersive if it was a scene with dialogue, rather than a summarized sentence. Despite the involved NPCs, there wasn't much dialogue and it would have offered some variety to the thread.

Good job and enjoy your rewards.

PM me if you have any questions, issues or concerns.

Total Word Count: 1551 words.

Review Request Link: viewtopic.php?f=242&t=16103&p=115380#p115382
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