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Return to Gilgarod: The Sepulchre

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Almund, Sclvoris
15th of Ymiden, 720

Dreaming was a strange experience for Tio.

It hadn't always been that way. One upon a time he'd been a regular old yludih. His dreams, disconnected from Emea, had been empty and shallow, yet dreams all the same. They had been his and his alone.

Then he'd competed in Cassion's game on Delroth's behalf. He'd fought, ran and lucked his way through challenge after challenge, and had eventually made it through to the final round: the journey through Gilgarod. What a nightmare that had been. And it had been going so well right up until the whole murdering Cassion part too. Regardless ever since then his dreams had always featured Avacer in some capacity; always trapped behind some kind of barrier, and always silently watching him from a throne.

Things had changed once again after the whole Emea debacle. Perhaps it had been the destruction of Emea, or perhaps it had been the fact that being physically trapped there for so many arcs prevented him from dreaming in the way he had before, but Tio had not seen Avacer at all during that time. After returned to the world as an Immortal Tio had once again been able to dream, though his dreams no longer held the same variety. Now he always dreamt of a nebula of red and silver energy unless he made a deliberate effort to walk to a new area of Emea. Avacer was never present in the nebula, though appeared appeared behind barriers once again when in regular dreamscapes; as fresh and healthy as ever.

Recently however his dreams had changed again.

When his dreams of Avacer had began the ancient king had always appeared strong and healthy; bearing the punishment of the throne with stoic pride. In recent trials however his shoulders had began to sag, his muscles withered, and his cheeks became hollow and gaunt. Each night saw him growing weaker and weaker, and it was clear that the life-force that Tio had gifted him was close to running out. Avacer, whom Tio had sworn he would return to free, did not have much time left.

Tio had been delaying his promised return to Gilgarod before due to a lack of power. He'd been hoping to strengthen the power of his magical sparks first before storming the fortress of the golems that served the throne. Ironically becoming an Immortal had set him back in that regard, since he'd traded his sparks for the potential of greater power in the future. He'd had half an arc now to adjust to being a godling, yet in all that time had made little progress in unlocking his divine powers. He needed more time. Time that Avacer did not have.

Tio stared out of the window of his castle, watching the storm that swept through the night and churned the seas of Scalvoris below into a frenzy. He'd woken up after another trip through the world of dreams, in which he'd seen Avacer again. The ancient king had looked at his weakest yet, though for once his eyes had not stared back at Tio with his usual defiance. For the first time ever Avacer's eyes had been closed, and his chest rose and fell with the feverish panting of someone waiting at the doorstep of death. Avacer only had a couple of trials of life left at best. If he wanted to free him he had to do it now, or it would be too late.

But could he do it? Did he have the power? His mastery of dreamwalking would help, but other than that he had nothing but his own mortal skills to use against a dimension that devoured kingdoms and a small army of stone golems. Who knew what fate would await him if he was captured? If an Immortal was forced upon the throne of Gilgarod who knew how much life-force it could drain from him, or what disasters it might wreak with the power it stole? Yes he had sworn to save Avacer, but it wasn't like he hadn't broken his promises before. Maybe it would be best for everyone if he just allowed Avacer to perish once again and stayed where it was safe, forgetting Gilgarod for good?

All it would cost was a broken promise.

Tio scowled and stalked away from the window, over to a chest of drawers. From within he pulled out a key made of bone, the skeleton key that'd granted him access to Gilgarod before, and glared at it. Why did breaking this promise bother him so much? He was a liar and cheat down to the core, and had known Avacer for less than a trial. Sure Avacer had sacrificed himself to take the place on the throne intended for Tio, but he wouldn't have even been alive had Tio not sold him half of his life-force in the first place. Was whatever debt he owed to the man not already paid?

No. No it wasn't. He was under no illusion that Avacer had done what he had out of anything other than self interest, but the fact remained that he had saved Tio's life. If there was anything worth repaying someone for, surely it would be that?

He had to do it. Even if it was stupid and likely to fail, he at least had to try. That little part of him that still considered himself to be a good person would never forgive him otherwise.

Tio took the key from the chest and brandished it like a sword, wincing as its skeletal mouth bit into his skin. The air in front of him shimmered as a great door of thick grey stone, like the entrance to a mausoleum, faded into existence in the middle of his bedroom. With the groan of stone upon stone the doors swung open, and from out of it came a gust of chilly, stale wind. The wind of the underworld.

Tio took hold of the fabric of reality and wrapped it around himself, settling it across his shoulders like a cloak. It should, in theory, keep him hidden from Gilgarod itself, though probably wouldn't protect him from being physically seen. With a shaky breath, Tio did his best to leave his doubts behind him and stepped through the doors.

It was time to return to Gilgarod.

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Cloaking: Cloaking is the ability to hide a Dreamwalker both in Emea and Idalos. They become able to force themselves into a level of existence somewhere outside of reality, Cloaking themselves from the perceptions of those around them. They become effectively undetectable by all means beyond physical, as their physical body is still present and will still interact with the physical reality as normal (such as bumping into or touching other people or objects, including leaving tracks in sand or snow or stirring vegetation when it's passed through). Furthermore, they may elect to Cloak themselves in Emea, making them undetectable to other entities or Dreamwalkers. While in effect, this protection is absolute. However, it does prevent the Dreamwalker from leaving the plane of existence they are in while activated. This means that they must deactivate Cloaking if they wish to journey from Idalos to various sections of Emea, to the Beneath, etc and vice versa.
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Re: Return to Gilgarod: The Sepulchre

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Tio knelt down on one knee and ran a hand through the dust he stood upon; feeling its course texture against his fingertips. Then he looked up, across the desert of dust and monolithic mausoleum ruins that stretched out as far as he could see. He liked to consider himself a chipper person, but this place had a melancholy atmosphere that even he wasn't immune to. Each speck of dust here was a fragment of a once glorious dream, each shattered gravestone a monument to a great king. The fact that this desert seemed to go on without end spoke of just how many dreams of a brilliant future had been worn away by time until nothing remained. So much history, so many achievements, all reduced to dust. Would this be the fate of Scalvoris too one day? To fall and fade from memory until it to lay here in ruins?

Would he still be alive then to see it?

Avacer had told him before that he should not envy the Immortals and their eternal life. The fact that mortals knew their time would one day end was what drove them to build wonders with such fervour; for if they didn't make their mark on the world in time the opportunity would slip out of their grasp. They did not consider the fact that their achievements would be forgotten in a thousand years, for that was so far away in the future that it would never apply to them. They would never see the day their kingdom fell into this sepulchre and rotted out of existence. Now that he was an Immortal himself Tio found that he could begin to comprehend what Avacer had meant. A thousand years was a long way away, and yet he might reach that time eventually. How much would the world have changed by then? Would he even recognise it anymore? That thought, for the very first time, set alight a small spark of fear in his heart.

Glancing behind him, Tio caught the last moment of the limestone staircase he had used to descend into Gilgarod vanishing into thin air. There had been no shadowy representation of his necromancy spark to whisper to him creepily on his way down this time, yet oddly enough that hadn't been a comfort to Tio. It reminded him that he didn't have magic to fight with any more: just the half-baked powers of a little godling and an exploding gauntlet. Not the best arsenal to take on an entire necropolis with, but it would have to suffice.

Striding forward, Tio set off into the desert in the direction of where the mausoleum ruins seemed to be gathered closer together. Somewhere around here there had to be a way up, and so the best option was to climb the tallest ruin around. If he got lucky one of them might lead right up to the next level, but if not it would at least let him get a proper look around for another way up. The golems had been able to move between floors, so he knew it was possible. He just needed to find out how without getting caught himself.

It was hard to keep track of time in a world without a sky, but if Tio had to guess he walked in silence for about an hour. There were no sounds, not even the faint whistling of wind, besides his own footsteps crunching against the dust beneath, yet even so Tio kept alert for even the slightest hint of movement. It was only because he was paying such close attention that he caught the sound of an ever so slight noise far off in the distance. It was musical - almost like a... harmonica?

Following the sound, Tio slowly made his way over to a patch of desert that seemed surprisingly bare of any ruins. The sound of the harmonica had been growing steadily, and now that he was close enough Tio could tell that it was coming from a hole in the ground just wide enough for him to fit through. Tio pulled a torch from out of his domain bag, lit it with his tinderbox, and then held it forwards as he headed into the hole.

It quickly became clear that he was in some sort of underground tomb built from sandstone. It was decrepit and covered in a thick layer of dust, but was still the most intact building he had seen so far in this necropolis even if it was as withered as a mummy's testicles. The harmica was still playing somewhere ahead, and so Tio pushed his way through a curtain of thick cobwebs into a circular antechamber. In the centre was a stone altar, upon which sat a one armed skeleton holding a rusted harmonica up to where is lips should have been.

A hundred questions popped into Tio's mind: Who are you? What is this tomb? Why can you move? Yet at that moment the one that came to the forefront of his mind, the one he couldn't not think about, slipped out of his mouth.

"How are you playing a harmonica? You don't have any lungs."
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The one-armed skeleton paused its performance and looked Tip up and down. It was silent for a while, before a refined male voice finally emerged from its lipless mouth. "That's your first question? Really? You're in a dimension filled with tombs, talking to a living skeleton, and the first question you ask is how I can play music?"

Tio nodded ardently. "Yes."

"... Really? Not where you are? Or what I am?"

"I already know. This is the sepulchre of Gilgarod, and you're the remains of a once-living king." Tio replied. "The music is the part that bothers me the most. I mean you don't have lips or lungs. I just can't wrap my head around how you can do that."

The skeleton tilted his head to the side in a show of confusion. "You aren't at all like the other new arrivals. I've never heard of anyone coming here who already knew what this place is. Nor anyone with their flesh intact for that matter. Who are you? Where are you king of?

"You first. How are you playing that music?"

"We're still on that? I've had a long time to practice, okay?"

"That doesn't explain anything!"

"Does it matter! There's more important things to discuss here!" The skeleton snapped, rising to his feet. A moment later he caught himself and sighed. "Ah damn it, I lost my cool. Sorry. How about he start again?" He stepped forward and offered his hand to Tio. "I'm Prince Esta Al'Vankeel the fifth, ruler of the Vankeel empire. Whom do I have the honour of addressing?"

"King Tio Silver, founder of the Holy Scalvoran Empire." Tio lied smoothly, taking the offered hand.

"Scalvoran? Hmm... Yes, I think there's someone who calls themselves the pirate lord of such a place down here somewhere." Esta nodded. "So then, King Silver, how is it that you still live? All the other residents of this place were already among the dead when they were thrown down here. Why has the throne not devoured you?"

Tio's eyes flickered across the skeleton's body, trying to discern any hints as to whether he was trustworthy or not. Sadly without a face or muscles that might betray his thoughts Esta was impossible to read. Should he reveal his mission to him? There was no reason not to trust him was there? Perhaps he could even persuade Esta to be his guide? "Because I have not been to the throne. I have a key that allowed me to enter this place."

"A key!" Esta's grip tightened around his hand, his voice becoming filled with excitement. "You-... How-... No, that doesn't matter! We should leave this place immediately! Please take me with you!"

Alarmed by his sudden grip, Tio's body instinctively fell back on its Da'riya training and kicked into action; twisting the arm in a motion designed to force it to let go. There was a sudden pop, and the skeletal arm went limp in his grasp like a puppet with its strings cut. Tio looked down uncomprehendingly at the arm in his hands that he'd accidentally pulled out of the skeleton's shoulder.

There was a brief moment of silence as Tio and Esta stared blankly at the severed arm. Then, painfully slowly, Tio gently pushed the arm back into its socket and gave Esta a pat on the shoulder. "Umm... my bad? Sorry."

It was hard to make the expression of someone having an aneurysm without either a face or heart, but somehow Esta managed to pull it off. He took a deep breath (despite that he had no lungs. How did he manage that?) And slowly released it. "Untold centuries spent amongst the dead, and the first chance I get at freedom comes in the hands of an idiot." He grumbled to himself. "Look... forget it. You must have had a reason for coming all the way down here right? What is it?"

"To reach the throne."

"The throne?" Esta scoffed. "Then you've chosen a bad time. The current king sitting upon it had almost been completely devoured, and when he is the throne will discard his bones down here and seek a new living king to devour."

Tio grimaced at the image. "I'm aware. I'm going to free the current king before he dies."

"That so?" Esta stroked his jawbone as if he had a beard. "Well now... I suppose you could use the help of someone who knows there way around then?"

"You'd be willing to help?"

"Not like I've got much to loose. I'm dead and stuck down here for all eternity, so things can't really get any worse. I'll take you up to the next floor and do what I can to help you reach the throne room, if in return you allow me to leave this place with you."

Tio considered the offer for the moment. It wasn't like Esta could be bought, blackmailed or threatened into betraying him, and it wouldn't cost him anything to bring Esta out with him. There didn't seem to be any downsides, but something didn't quite sit right about all of this. "Deal. How do we get up to the next floor?"

"Excellent! Follow me!"
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How long had they been walking now? Hours? Days? It was hard to keep track of time without a sky to read. Esta didn't seem to feel fatigued by the journey; making light conversation about how the world had changed since his death, but the further they walked the more Tio's legs started to ache with effort. The stray suspicious that Esta might be leading him around randomly began to take seed in his mind, but before it took root fully a large grey tower far away in the distance came into view. Though it was not very wide it was taller than any tower he had seen before: jutting up from the ground like a needle.

"Here we are: The Funnel." Esta explained, gesturing to the spire. "It's like the spine connecting the various floors of Gilgarod together. You can follow the stairs up to the next level?"

"Can't I take it all the way up to the throne room?" Tio asked.

"Not if you want to avoid the Sentinels. They don't stay guard down here since they don't see the residents of this place as a threat. Skeletons aren't exactly strong after all; only a handful can actually move like I can. They only patrol the stairs connecting the higher floors, and leave guarding this place to Khellon."

"Who's Khel-" Tio started to say, but cut off as a horribly familiar howl sounded in the distance. The blood drained from his face faster than water down a drain. "'... Please tell me that wasn't a dog."

Esta chuckled mirthlessly. "What better to guard against a land of bones? Khellon is a huge, three-headed hound trained to be absolutely vicious to anyone besides the Sentinels."

A giant, three-headed dog? It occurred to Tio that maybe Avacer didn't need his help after all? Perhaps it would be better to turn back, go home and never ever ever go anywhere near the giant hellhound! He slapped himself around the face to dispel those thoughts before they could sap his resolve.

"Not a fan of dogs are you?" Esta drawled, noticing his discomfort.

"I may have a few issues with them. Is there a way to sneak past it? Play some music that'd send it to sleep maybe?"

"What? No, don't be stupid! Why would a dog care about music? I hate to make you nervous but you're probably the only meat it'll have seen in millennia. If it so much as sniffs you it's going to chase you until the ends of time."

The thought made Tio's stomach lurch with dread, but also sparked the beginnings of an idea in his head. He looked around at the surrounding mausoleums, noting their various shapes and distances from each other.

"You know what? I might just have an idea..."
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Just as it had done for time immemorial, Khellon stood guard at the entrance of The Funnel.

Time was a faded concept down in The Sepulchre. Without the instruments with which to measure it, the flow of events blended together into one long, unending moment. The living would be driven crazy in such a realm, but the undead, such as Khellon, possessed a grim patience that made his vigil bearable. He did not care how long he stood before the doors, for he had no nerves in his paws to ache, nor muscles to stir with restlessness. His three heads stared out across the desert of dust, watching and waiting for signs of movement that would provide him a reason to move once more in defence of the gate he guarded.

Watching and waiting. On and on. Forever and ever. Until the end of time itself.

Far in the distance a blur of movement caught his eye, and Khellon immediately stood straighter and focused in on it. Very few residents of this land were capable of independent movement, and through sheer probability those that wandered these planes crossed paths with him sooner of later. His claws dug grooves into the dirt beneath his feet, a growl escaped his jawbones, and his shoulders hunched forwards into a prowl as the lingering soul of a predator ignited within him. With the stealth of a panther he paced forwards, always keeping the eyes of one of his heads trained on the gate in case of a diversion. The echo of excitement well up within his chest, for it was these sparse moments of action that gave meaning to his existence. He would investigate this disturbance, and if it turned out to be someone who his masters had not approved to pass through the gate then he would chase them off or devour them.

Amidst the distance the form of a humanoid figure began to take shape, and Khellon's growl deepened as he tasted the sweet tang of living flesh in the air. It brushed across his ancient bones, kindling that jealous hunger for life that all undead possessed, and he sped up into a light jog. Oh how long it had been since he had tasted hot, fresh blood against his teeth! He let out a wild howl, and was overjoyed to see the figure start to run away. He was to be treated to a chase too! Oh how wonderful! There was nothing like a good hunt to whet the appetite.

The man darted away into a small town of mausoleums, no doubt hoping to duck and hide away amidst the ruins, and Khellon let out a scoffing huff. The scent of sweat clung to the air like a thick rope, painting a pathway directly to his quarry. At this rate it would be over too quickly. Khellon allowed his pace to slow as he too entered the mausoleums and followed the weaving trail through them. It would not do to allow the fun to pass so quickly. Moments like these were so very rare that it was important they be milked for all the entertainment they were worth.

At last the trail came to the doors of one of the larger mausoleums, and Khellon knew the hunt was at an end. While not exactly challenging it had been amusing for the short while it lasted, and the promise of the feast to come would have had him licking his lips had he possessed them. He silenced his growl and crept forwards, determined to make only the lightest of noises as he walked by allowing the tips of his claws to brush the stone floor. Such things would terrify the man more than all the howling in the world, and the thought of the mortal's terror pleased him. The scent led him into the main antechamber where a large stone coffin lay, the fresh hand-shaped disturbances of dust and thick musk of life seeping from out of the cracks betraying that his prey had hidden within. What a fool indeed. With creeping slowness Khellon prowled up on the coffin, enjoying every moment of anticipation, and placed his front paws on the coffin lid. Then with a sudden, jerking heave he shoved the lid back to reveal his prey!

A set of clothes.

"Now!"

Confusion's paralysing grasp held him in place as Khellon's head swivelled around just in time to register the heavy stone headstone swinging down from the ceiling to meet him. Like a bowling ball striking pins his front ribs were scattered by the impact, while the rest of his body was unceremoniously swept off the ground and dunked into waiting coffin. A panicked snarl slipped from his mouth as he realised what was happening and desperately tried to claw his way out, but his bone body had been knocked out of shape by the impact and could do no more than flail wildly as a one-armed skeleton appeared above him, heaving the lid of the coffin back over him. Khellon snarled with unbridled rage swearing eternal vengeance on the living one for their trickery and the coffin lid closed and darkness eclipsed his vision.



"Hurry Esta. Tie it down!"

Tio leapt from the rafters of the mausoleum roof and grabbed the rope he'd used to swing to tombstone at Khellon, using it to abseil down safely to the floor in seconds. No sooner had his feet met cold stone than he was sprinting forwards towards the coffin, helping Esta secure the stone lid down with more ropes before Khellon could break free. Only when it was completely secure and no longer rattled every time the hound within scratched its claws against it did Tio breathe a sigh of relief.

"Do all of your plans involve you getting naked?" Esta breathed snarkily, unsure as to whether he should be impressed or disturbed.

Tio smirked as he retrieved his domain bag from where he'd hidden it behind a pillar and pulled his duplicity suit out of it."Only the best ones. Now come on, let's get out of here and head up to the next floor before anything can go wrong."
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Experience: 10 no magic xp

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Running x5
Trap Making x 1

Renown: 5

Skill Usage: Overplay of trap-making skills. Beginners luck one would suppose, but no. With 0 trapping experience I doubt you'd be able to pull such a feat. Consequences handed down and described below.

Loot/Losses: none

Injuries/Conditions: Anxiety and paranoia building from having to confront a large and ugly undead dog (One of Tio's greatest fears) Will fade when/if he finishes his mission here.

Consequences: A pack of three dogs will follow and pursue Tio on the next level. They will not fall for any traps he sets for them, and can sense his presence within fifty yards. However, there's a way to outsmart them. WIth Tio's superior tactics and persuasion skills, he may be able to convince the undead on the next level that it's a good idea to lather themselves in embalming honey (a favorite treat of the hounds). This may provide Tio with the edge he needs to get to the next stage of the Untold.

Comments: Tio is such an entertaining man, and you write for him with such great skill. While you did massively overplay trap-making, I think the idea was clever. It just might've worked better if Tio was a better trapper or had one with him.

Also, you claimed too many knowledges for a solo. You get 6 for solos, plus 1 for each post after the first page.

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