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When Dan reached the edge of the river, he slid down off Cloud, ran the stirrups up out of her way, slackened the girth, and tethered both her and Smoke where they could graze in comfort and safety. Neither of the sturdy grey ponies needed much encouragement to start munching on the fresh new grass. He retrieved his fishing gear, including his line and his fish trap, from the pack saddle that Smoke wore, and set them down on the bank beside him. Then he kicked off his boots, rolled up the legs of his patched trousers, and went to see if he could find a good place to set up his fish trap for a few days.

There was a hollow against the bank that looked promising, but first, he decided, he needed something to bait the trap with - not to mention something he could eat today. A tickled or angled fish would solve both problems, and he eased down to lie flat on his front on the bank, staring into the water. His sleeveless hide vest left his arms bare to the shoulder in the warm, late Ashan air, and his sun-darkened skin made the assorted scars on them stand out pale as fine lace.

A small trout settled in the hollow he had picked out for his trap, its fins flickering lightly to hold it against the current. Dan slipped his bare arm very slowly into the water behind it to minimise any ripples that might scare it away, and waved his fingers gently like weeds swaying in the current. He drifted his waving fingers up under the fish, with the lightest brushes he could manage, until he sensed the movement of the gills. Then he struck, hooking his fingers into the gill slits and flinging the fish up onto the bank with an almost convulsive swing of his arm. He whipped round, pulling the knife from his rough rope belt to kill it before it could thrash its way back into the water - and froze when he saw someone approaching him.

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It was a boy in his mid teens, gangly limbs supporting a sturdy body, dressed much like a farmer. He had also stopped, frozen, as if seeing something unexpected. Dan was familiar with that look. What he wasn't familiar with, was what the boy did next.

He said softly, disbelievingly, Dan?

Dan jerked his head in a stiff nod, not quite believing it himself - how the fardles did this boy know his name? - and then abruptly realised that the fish was getting away and lunged after it. He landed flat on his belly in the grass, and knocked the wind out of himself in the process, but he got the fish before it flopped and flapped its way back into the river, and that was the important thing. He made sure it was dead before he looked up again, unwilling to risk losing out on a good dinner, but when he did, he found the boy had moved closer and was studying him.

Dan pulled himself to a seated position, ignoring the new grass stains on his clothes and the reopened hole in his trouser knee where the overhand stitch holding an old tear shut had come undone, tipped his head on one side and raised an eyebrow.

The boy gave a small, shy, smile and began to sign. "Hi," he said. "I'm Jack. You pulled me out of a pit trap, when I was little and took me home, do you remember?"

Dan did remember, now that he thought about it. It had been a long time ago, and the boy - Jack - had grown and changed far too much for Dan to have recognised him. Not to mention learned Common Sign, because the small child had only been able to babble in spoken words.

Dan said, inanely, "You've grown a bit since then."

Jack laughed. "I should hope so! I wouldn't be much use on our farm, if I was the same size I was when I was four arcs old!" He sobered, and sat on the grass too. "Seriously though, I wanted to thank you properly, in words you could understand. You probably saved my life, you know, and you told me then that you only knew Sign, so I figured I'd learn it so if I ever ran into you again..." He shrugged and waved an arm at the situation they were in. "I could actually talk to you, and you to me."



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Dan nodded. "And now you're here, and we're talking." He pulled the fish closer and began to clean it, the smell of fish guts tainting the air between them. Dan was used to it, to be fair, but faced with someone actually observing him, the way Jack was, he was becoming painfully aware of every less than pleasant smell, every stain, and mend, and worn and ragged part, on his clothing. Of - anything that any 'normal' person might use to cast him as something less, something lower, something whose needs and wants were not as valid or as important as 'real' needs and wants, and could therefore be trampled over.

Jack was just staring. "I thought you'd be taller," he said at last. "And older. You don't look much different from how I remember, and yet, I guess, I expected you to?"

Dan shrugged. "It's the living out in all weathers," he replied, giving his usual explanation - the one someone had given him. "Once you weather to a certain point, you stay there for decades. You tan like leather, which preserves and remains the same, rather than tanning like sunburn, which peels away later and reverts to how you were. But enough about me. How are things with you? Fallen into any more holes?"

"No, no more holes." Jack laughed, and settled back into the grass. "I'm from a farming family, which I think you knew? Two older brothers and a younger sister. I'm learning to work the farm with my family - well, I've always helped out as much as I can, that's a given for a farming family - but these trials I'm big enough and old enough to tackle the bigger tasks too, and help with the planning. My oldest brother's going to inherit the farm, eventually, so I won't own ours, but there are options. I can work for my brother - he's nice enough, I guess, and it'll be familiar surroundings, or I can marry into a family that doesn't have an heir for their farm yet, or I can strike out on my own or I can go find something completely different to do. I haven't decided yet, but...."

Dan baited his fishtrap, slid it into the river, spared a glance for the ponies and his gear - they were fine - and settled in to listen himself. It was always a pleasant change to meet someone he could actually talk to - Jack had been right about that - and with the amount and speed that Jack talked - the boy hadn't changed in that aspect - Dan probably wouldn't need to add very much to the conversation himself.



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Name:Dandelion

Points awarded: 10xp

Knowledge:
Needlecraft: overhand stitch
Socialisation: turning a conversation to someone else
Fieldcraft: dress for the weather
Fieldcraft: don't let live food escape through distraction
Fieldcraft: finding food in ways that serve multiple purposes
Logistics: gather the tools needed for the task before starting it

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Skill Review: Appropriate to level.

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Hello again! Let's jump into this, shall we?

This a great look at day to day life for Dan, and his thought process as he goes about his fishing. The interaction was a surprise and the fish almost got away!

A few things about the named knowledge. Unfortunately, I can't award the following two:

Fieldcraft: living out in all weathers, weathers your face too
Logistics: finish tasks once you have started them

The fieldcraft knowledge isn't really fieldcraft; it's more cosmetology. The logistics knowledge, as well, would benefit from a reword. Something like "making sure one has the right gear for the right job".

Please rework those two knowledges and pm me with your updates. I can amend the review then.

Great job and enjoy your rewards! :D




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