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27th of Saun, arc 716
He could hear the words coming form the person outside, and yet the sounds wouldn't go past his ears into his brain. He could not decipher what the person was saying, nor did the person even know if he was there. He was unable to move, and yet he felt lost, lost in the world, lost in his own skin. How much time had passed since he saw the jaws of the beast come down straight towards him and take his hand. Had it been a trial? A week? A season? How many had the beast killed in the meantime? How many did Aeon's actions and emotions sentence to death? He didn't feel like fighting the pain, and the light on the end of the tunnel kept getting smaller and smaller.

Help.. He could hear the person saying. Who was the person going to help? The young squire didn't want help for himself, he wanted help for all of the people he doomed by failing to stop the monster. Still, he nodded as he had no energy left to say a word. He felt cold all of a sudden. Could it be that he was buried under the darkness so long, that the cold cycle came? He could feel the chill from the wind without issues, as he shivered. The warm sensation of the blood going around his skin was slowly disappearing, as everything he was once feeling became numb at a single moment.

The person had released him from the prison of the torn shirt, as his wounds were quickly covered with the soft fabric, which was already quite bloody. Aeon felt the pain, incredible amounts, as the person, which turned out to be a woman, attempted to stop the bleeding. Yet, with all of the pain, he couldn't scream. He didn't have the energy. He tried with all of his strength to let out a roar, and yet he couldn't manage to pull the air out of his lungs. Too much air, and too much energy needed for a scream, so he only shook his head slightly.

Not managing to figure out what the woman was doing until it was too late, Aeon closed his eyes from the quick stinging feeling around his neck. The young squire was still pretty disorientated, not figuring out that there was a hole in the collapsed building, and still being unable to connect the letters and sounds coming from the woman's mouth into words that made sense. Everything was so blurry, even sounds appeared to not be whole and clear, but instead some sort of deviation from what the beings in Idalos could produce with their mouths.

What he could hear very clearly were the words coming from the people. The people long dead, the people dying, and the people doomed to death from the monster. They all screamed for help so loud, Aeon wanted to slice his ears off just so he didn't need to hear them. They all looked at him, and reached out with their arms, as he was the one man that survived. How did he survive, and yet all of the others didn't? What made him so special? In the moment of the woman moving his lifeless body outside the wreckage, the young squire could see the faces of the people. They weren't in pain anymore, they were now filled with anger and hatred, as they felt betrayed. What made the young squire live, while every other person he tried to save died?

Aeon could feel all of their emotions, all of what they wanted him to know, from the nicest to the worst of things, and all of it made him genuinely sad. His eyes were filled with tears, both in the real world, and in his mind, as he tried reaching out to the dead, but the claws of the beast came at him once more, pulling him back into life. He wanted to be one of them. He didn't want to be left in the world alone, to be the lone survivor, to be the one responsible. It was truly a horrifying moment for the blond squire, but those ones were the moments that needed to be overcome the most.

"L..listen.." He said, coughing out the little blood he had within his mouth. He might've bit his tongue rather hard during the session of immense pain, even subconsciously. "..listen..to me.." Every word felt harder than the last one, as his eye started closing briefly. The darkness wanted him, and yet the light would not let him go. "you need to wa-..to warn them..they.. they must run.." Aeon managed to say, before coughing out the hot liquid once more, now some of it even falling on the woman. He slipped straight back into the world his brain had made for him, in which he could see only one face now, and it was his father.

After several moments, another face appeared, like the smoke from a freshly-made fire. It was Ryqos now, and the faces of his mentors gave Aeon some new hope, the new hope to keep fighting, for the light was worth it. And still, he had unfinished business in this world, unfinished business he couldn't just leave without making sure it was taken care of. He was going to ride a Jacadon, and not even the jaws of death could stop him. He was going to help them. To save them. All of them. No matter from how small or big a threat, he was going to be there for his city, for his people. For he needed to stop the monster, he needed to catch the bandits, he needed to root out the weed, the last one quite literally.
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The squire was in a world of his own, mumbling incoherently to himself as Rita worked. By now she had managed to close up the lacerations on his arms, moving a tourniquet just above the severed hand and removing the rest. He was crying saying something about the dead coming to get him. It was hard to follow at the best of times. Swallowing hard as she readied her scalpel to begin amputating. He squirmed and managed to spit out words with an unhealthy amount of blood.
”L..listen..listen..to me…” Rolling him onto his side to keep his airways clear. “You need to wa-..to warn them.. They.. they must run “ There was more blood. She stopped working and watched the man unconscious on her lap.
“Shhh do not worry squire, you saved us all. Wounding the beast and slowing it down so we could slay it with no one dying.” Gently stroking his head. The blood meant internal bleeding. It was too much to have come from a mouth injury. The squire was already dead.
Rita sat in silence, holding him close against her chest soothing him, letting him feel her warmth. Just another number, just another name. A living person whose life she was going to steal away. Rita the killer. She cried, bowing her head against his and crying. All those people she had failed to save, watching her surrounding them both. Grasping out with empty faces watching waiting for another to join them in her nightmares. It was cold as ice, a blizzard closing in, shaking in fear. The woman she had killed in the ice, the two slaves and the girl in the street. Chanting Rita, Rita, Rita each word like ice striking her.
“No, no, no. I tried it’s not like I didn’t try!” Rita,Rita RITA! “GO AWAY!” Curling up hiding away from them. Suddenly there was light, a warm comforting aura banishing the demons of her mind. A voice like silk and the warm touch of a hand stroking her cheek.
“Dry, your tears my love. The pain will be gone soon so show it strength.” Looking up slowly, a bright shimmering form of a young Sev’ryn woman, bright green eyes and auburn hair. The figure fading into starlight, the one she had lost so long ago.
With a deep breath she slowed her breathing and set the young squire down. Amputation always made her squeamish, this one went fine. A good clean wound which didn’t require as much work as she first expected. If he was bleeding inside there was nothing she could do anyway so she moved onto the eye next. A clean laceration from temple to chin, above and below the socket was a simple matter of a few stitches. She took longer than she normally would, her normal stitches were designed to be strong and quick to create. The disadvantage is that more often than not it would create a little more scarring than usual, this one she was doing now was much slower but tidier and strong enough for the wound. The eye was damaged by the strike, but not badly. With proper care it would heal, that, however, would take a very long time to happen. For now, he’d be practically blind in that eye and need a patch to protect it from light. Rita cleaned the wound as best she could, applying the balm, gauze and padding. Bleeding done, now the breaks. After that, I’m out of anything so just sit with him till the end
“Okay then I’m just gonna set your arm first and then check to find where your hip is damaged.” The broken arm was as simple as putting it straight and tying it up with splints and bandages. The dislocated shoulder, that was difficult and painful for the patient. She probed around his hip watching his reactions, from what she could tell it wasn’t broken. A small push and it was back in place, testing the movement.
She was done. With a sigh she collapsed exhausted, laying next to the wounded squire. Dusk falling over the city, the pair cloaked in shadows. Rita humming an Ithecal tune, adding in words every now and then. The wind shifted blowing away the smoke and up above she could the stars flickering into being.
“Do you see the stars, squire? Are they not amazing?” She watched the young man breathing, he wasn’t in pain and she wasn’t going to kill him. If he was going to die, he was going to die. Rita had done everything she could. Well except pray, but when had that ever done anything.
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27th of Saun, arc 716
The cave appeared to be a dark and wet place, without life. The floors were covered with strange goo, while the walls did not seem to exist. The darkness of it was spreading to the end of the world in every direction the young squire could look at. He couldn't feel his muscles, nor see any part of his body, and the darkness appeared to be affecting more than just the walls. Aeon felt the touch of cold across his skin, and yet he couldn't see that very skin, nor move or control it in any way. He was barefoot, or the goo just passed straight through his shoes. Without the ability to turn his head, the young one stared straight into nothingness, and wondered what had happened.

A voice came echoing through the cave. “Shhh do not worry squire, you saved us all. Wounding the beast and slowing it down so we could slay it with no one dying.” Whose voice was that? Aeon couldn't recognize the person talking, nor what it talked about. What had even happened to him before he ended up in the cave? He wasn't dead, no, he felt strangely alive, and the fact that he could hear a voice proved that his ears were still there, somewhere.

The voice came again, but it didn't seem to be talking to the young squire. Whomever was out there in the cave was talking to themselves, or another person Aeon could not hear. Why did the voice sound familiar all of a sudden? Like he had heard it speak before, but he couldn't put a voice together with a face. Aeon couldn't even picture a face in his mind. What happened? How come something kept blocking him from thinking about the current situation. Then he felt just the tiniest piece of his foot return, as he attempted to move it as hard as possible. He needed confirmation, he needed to know he wasn't dead.

Then a slight feeling in his arm. Then in his hip. Aeon could feel the flashes of the feeling appear and be gone, as he steadily but surely kept his attempts to move any of his limbs. Squire. He was a squire, correct. He was in a battle. In the battle, with that monster. That was what happened. He was buried under that building, and that person, that woman came. Was she the one talking to him still, was she the one besides him that looked upon the stars? The young one could not see any stars. It was a cave, how could a cave have any stars? Right as he asked himself, the exit to the place appeared far off into the horizon. The light was small and low, but it was there, and as hard as Aeon tried to move, the bigger the light became. He was suddenly consumed by it, and he was forced to close his eyes, or at least attempt to.

As he closed his eyes, he felt the light disappear, and as he opened them again, the young one was no longer in the cave. He was in the lowtown of Andaris, his home, on the cold stone as he was recovering from what appeared to be the greatest battle of his life.

"That was a lie" He whispered through the red teeth of his mouth. He wasn't bleeding no more, and he tried as hard as possible to get up, but it wouldn't work. "I shot it, the monster, straight through the eye, and it wasn't bothered by it." Aeon said, in regards to the first attempt the woman made of comforting his soul. He didn't slow it down whatsoever, in fact, he only made it angrier, if he could remember correctly. He only gave it a taste of his flesh, and then disappeared as it wanted another. That must have made it angry. The question was, how many died before the beast was satisfied? It was invincible, completely immune to any weapon Aeon knew of. Was it still somewhere out there, eating? It needed to be stopped. He needed to stop it, as he tried to get up and sit. Failure. His muscles were too heavy and the energy too lacking.

"Why are you here?" He said to the woman besides him, choosing to ignore her remarks of the stars. As he looked upon her, he saw the tail. She was Ithecal. Aeon didn't know much about her race, but he presumed they were good and funny people, seeing that was the way one of his father's friends was. She saved him, so she must have had more good than bad in her at least. "Why are you here helping me, a lone soldier, instead of the hundreds or thousands of wounded inside midtown? He whispered, finding the previous sound he made while talking to the woman too tiring. He desperately needed some sleep, and yet he was too afraid to close his eyes underneath the skies. What if he went straight back into the cave once he saw the darkness caused by his skin? Then he tried closing them, only to remember how one of the eyes was badly damaged, if not completely dead. He closed and opened his other eye, only to realize there weren't any consequences.
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Of course, she was lying, no way was Rita going to tell a dying patient that he had failed in his final act. The beast was now ripping through midtown and… that wasn’t worth thinking on.
“Hmm well a little. Your efforts did weaken the beast and enrage it to make mistakes. The killing blow was dealt from the side of the eye you blinded but yes some people did fall.” He was a little out of it still, Rita idly wondering what was going on in the young man’s head.
”Why are you here?” She looked over and sat up, checking his temperature with her palm.
“Why are you here helping me, a lone soldier, instead of hundreds or thousands of wounded inside midtown?” It was little more than a whisper. She went to answer but the words caught in her throat. She hadn’t been counting or even take the time to think about it. Each vial held around fifteen doses and she was given twenty vials. I’ve murdered almost three hundred people. I haven’t even treated that many in Krome yet.
“I go where I was ordered. Here to find you and leave this city. Unfortunately, I can only do one of those things which means you’re stuck with me, young squire. Now hold still.”
Whether the squire felt the needle or not she didn’t know, but a shot of antibiotics would be worth it in the long run. Followed by a very small amount of adrenaline, enough to keep him awake but not cause any damage. His soldiering days would be over with these injuries. Rita was still a little unsure of how bad the hip was, he may need a cane and walk with a limp or it would be normal, with a bit of after treatment. For now, however, all they could do was wait. Part of Rita wanted to leave the city and get as far away as possible. That would mean leaving a patient and that was against her nature. So the pair watched and waited as over the wall in midtown the battle waged on soon to end. For now, the young squire and Ithecal doctor were out of the battle.
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Aeon
Knowledge:
Losing control in flight means an ugly descent
Acrobatics: jump as though your life depends on it
Acrobatics: Rolling dodge
Detection: Focus on the important details
Detection: Sounds of horror
Archery: Short bow: Quickdraw
Creature: Unaffected by arrows
Creature: Two heads
Creature: Strong
Creature: Three-foot tail like a whip
Creature: Fire-lined tongue
Creature: Can bleed
Blades: Longsword: Heroic pose
Blades: Longsword: Defensive strikes
Philosophy: Face your fears
Philosophy: Better to die in triumph then die unknown
Philosophy: Is there nothing beyond death?
Running: Dodging to keep away form danger
Endurance: Fighting through pain
Endurance: Facing the world
Pain: Makes it difficult to track time
Pain: Disorientating
Medic: Ithecal
Medic: Bit you?
Medic: Saved your life

Loot:
N/A
Injuries:
Loss of left eye
Loss of hand
Scar down side of face
Bruised and scraped from head to toe – every muscle aching and in need of a long soak and a few trials of rest to recover.
Scratch down the length of your spine which will scar if not properly treated
Fame:
Total: +4
+2 Act of Bravery (Attacking Zvezbeast)
+2 Act of bravery (Attacking Zvezbeast)
Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/5
Structure: 5/5
Zvezdana
Knowledge:
None I’m afraid! But the thread was amazing to read. I loved the additional knowledge and information you provided about the creature. I could just feel all that hunger and desire for destruction. Also the wilful playfulness of the beast. A difficult task which was written with masterful strokes. Well done!
Loot:
N/A
Injuries:
N/A
Fame:
N/A

Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/5 (Even though you nibbled your thread partner)
Structure: 5/5
Rita
Knowledge:
The evacuation of mid-town
Detection: Useless armour
Tactics: Prioritising patients according to injury
Location: Rain water drains
Medicine: Easing the pain
Endurance: Blocking out gore
Detection: Things out of place – a chewed sword?
Detection: Paying attention to the way wreckage falls
Detection: Sounding out hollows
Medicine: Calming your patient with an introduction
Surgery: Tourniquets to stop bleeding
Medicine: Ithecal venom to numb pain
Strength: Dragging a dead weight
Squire: Disorientated by pain
Psychology: Battling your own demons
Psychology: Traumatic memories triggered in times of crisis
Surgery: Stitching wounds
Surgery: Tidying up a limb


Loot:
N/A
Injuries:
Strained muscle in back from carrying Aeon and dragging him about. Will take five trials to heal.
Fame:
+2 Act of kindness - killing to injured Volareon
Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/5
Structure: 5/5
One small note under structure would be the spelling of the Qe’Dreki – not a big point but enough to jolt me out of the story. Also please be aware of usage of syringes, antibiotics and the like. In Idalos terms there are reasonable substitutes for these types of medicines which I would recommend using in future threads. Modern terminology for medicines also causes the suspended disbelief to come crashing down.
Please ensure that the cost of medicines used, gauze and padding are deducted from your ledger. Maybe even send Aeon the bill to recoup your costs?

Comments:
First off I must apologise for the ridiculous delay in having this tread graded. I grovel at your feet.
I loved it though. All the excitement and daring action between Aeon and Zvezbeast followed by his descent into melancholy and all the disorientation of severe severe injuries. I loved Rita’s response to being sent out through the water tunnels and would be happy to have her as my medic any day! Aeon’s a lucky man to have someone so competent turn up – you’re welcome!
If you feel I've missed anything or if you have questions about your review, please don't hesitate to send me a quick PM. Thank you!
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