New Eden (Finn)

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Alistair
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43rd of Vhalar, Arc 716

Meditate, Alistair, he whispered to himself, trying to keep the thoughts silent. It had only ever been under the perfect conditions where he could truly meditate, and release his tether from his surroundings; this time, he hoped, would be one such time. The conditions were wondrous - the wind blew softly against his skin as the sun was concealed by clouds. There was, however, no rain and nothing to endanger him. If there were ever such a thing as a perfect condition, it would be here and now, within a beautiful mid-Vhalar day. The only moment he'd experienced better weather than this certainly had to be in Venora, back at home, during Ymiden and Ashan.

Of course, his mind was not entirely clear of bothersome thoughts, which was a greater inhibitor than the external conditions around him. As he buried his feet into the grass, there was a haunting reminder of just how endangered he was at this moment; haunted by some spectral wraith seeking revenge against the Lich-Mother. Pursuing Adriel en Avellach, an artifact that even the Immortals seemed to readily avoid. His time in Ne'haer had been one entirely of danger, and with each passing moment came another intrusion into his psyche over the state of his well-being.

He entered only a half-focused state, not entirely cleared yet not entirely bound to other distractions. It was good enough, he knew, and so he began to channel the mana around him towards his body as a focal point. Pockets of ether were pulled around him, and as his eyes were steadily shut, a great portal began to form not twenty meters way from where he sat. It began as merely a blazing doorway, in appearance, like all the rest of his ruptures. But it spread out, and became a sphere of pure black. The blazing apparel instead became an array of outlining, transparent rings, violet in shade.

He was beginning to learn how to cast the Rend, the most powerful portal one could unleash; one capable of transporting armies. One capable of flooding a city with the tides around it.

Of course, his skill - despite being greater than most he'd known - was not quite there yet. The only other Rupturer in history who'd been able to cast the Rend, who he'd known of at least, had been Reyard. The founder of modern Rupturing. The man who revolutionized it - changed the game.

And so, try as he could, the scale of Alistair's portal could not expand far past the boundaries of what he'd been able to do before. No matter how well he managed to stabilize the compression, or to properly align and meld the pockets of ether within the portal, it inevitably destabilized after a certain point and nearly knocked him back with the torrent of wind that unleashed afterwards. Alistair sighed, relaxing himself and attempting to recuperate any ether he'd lost in the attempt. He would have to perform this many times before he could claim to even be capable of it at all, let alone mastering it. Now that he was in Ne'haer - a place more tolerant of magic - he could practice to his heart's content. And so, he would very well use that opportunity.
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Telar has been gone for almost season and half. That alone was not enough to make him feel anxious. Yet, he still did not feel entirely himself. Telar was old, half blind with pacifistic attitude that any peacemaker could envy. It was the events of earlier that season that put Finn on an edge about his mentor’s wellbeing. He refused to think or even believe that the old man might have fell prey to the creatures of horror. He’d know, right? He’d feel it somehow, no?
Shouldering a sack with few supplies for the day, Finn made it out of Ne’haer’s gates, heading south toward Treth. Finn was not planning on heading all the way to the small farming town. For now, he was just casting his searching nets a little wider instead of solely focusing on the city. There would hardly be anyone anymore who might have heard of an old man who made his slow progress through the streets too many days ago. Telar wasn’t that memorable unfortunately.
In fact, Finn could take this opportunity as a little more than a simple scouring for his awol friend and teacher. He has not been outside the walls ever since arriving. Not that he expected it to be different to other cities he has been to but it was nice to get out once in awhile. The trodden path that he was taking was somewhat busy but perhaps something in the air made everyone retreat into their own minds. The faces that passed him by were all distant. In the perfect Vhalar day, he almost felt as if he was walking through a sea of stolid souls. Until, he saw something that made him stop dead in his tracks - a friction in the fabric of reality. The ominous purple breakage in the air that ran goosebumps across his skin. Magic. And magic meant mages. Telar only ever told him about various factions where certain mages congregated. But was there anything like a general community? Finn was not sure. Though faced with the fact that one was right here, one who seemed to be skillful gave Finn hope that perhaps he would know more than a mere common folk.
Whoever the man was that practiced his craft out in the open, he earned only a few sideway glances from the apathetically moving crowd. Finn, on the other hand, was unashamedly spectating. He knew little of the various magics, only what Telar told him and Telar tended to focus only on Graft which was their discipline. But didn’t this look like Rupturing? Or maybe Aberration? He couldn’t pinpoint it, but the open demonstration was enough for him to underpin his belief that talking to the stranger could bear more fruit than keeping on walking, or quizzing farmers. He lingered on the edge of the road, not advancing for a good reason. He recognized the look on the man’s face more than the domain he was practicing. From personal experience, Finn knew that meditation better go undisturbed. At least that’s what his Sev’ryn friend taught him many arcs ago.
Nevertheless, it appeared that something did unsettle the man in the field as a sudden burst of wind slapped Finn across the face. It was slightly stronger than a breeze, but not strong enough to knock him back. Now, he was glad for the distance that he kept.
Measuring, assuming, Finn began his approach. Stepping of the track, the priest cleared his throat once close enough for the gentleman to hear. “Excuse me, sir. Good trial.” He spoke clearly.
”I noticed you practicing magic. I was just hoping if I could ask you something.” Finn went straight to the core of the situation rather than tiptoeing around, but any sense of emergency was missing from his tone. Casual. He kept it pure and casual.
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Silence continued. For a long while, Finn stood there wondering if he was heard. But the longer it took, the more the breeze brushed against his cheeks and the only sound was gentle rustling of the grass, the more Finn was acutely aware of how misplaced he felt in the situation. It probably was not wise, nor welcomed for him to just interrupt someone else's practice. He wouldn't know. Telar only initiated him into Graft. They never went through training or practice of any kind. Dropping his gaze, he managed to hide a tinge of disappointment in his hues as he turned around. He was used to being ignored, but it still stung when he asked for help. For the briefest of fractions of trills, he felt like the beggar he used to be in Rharne and it nearly crushed his chest with shadows of anxiety still familiar, if a little distant, in his mind.
By the time he walked back onto the trodden path, Finn composed himself. Head held high once again, he counted that meeting as unfortunate and it did not bother any more. He would find Telar eventually, with or without strangers' help.
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They do not yet understand the purpose of forgiveness. It is not to spare wrongdoers a punishment they deserve. It is to spare the injured ones the ongoing pain they do not.

~ Ymiden
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Alistair


Points!:

Story: 2/5 (as per peer review guide: abandoned thread)
Collaboration: 1/ 5 (1 post)
Structure: 0/ 5 (thread abandoned)
Knowledge:

Ne'haer: Tolerant of magic
Rupturing: The level of half-focus which is good enough

Loot:
NA
Fame:
NA
Devotion:
NA
Magic:
These points may be used for arcana
Finn


Points!:

Story: 3/5
Collaboration: 1/ 5 (1 collaborative post)
Structure: 5/ 5
Knowledge:

Etiquette: Don't interrupt a mage in focus
Investigation: Casting your net wider after a time
Investigation: Made more difficult when you are searching for someone who is easy to forget

Loot:
None
Fame:
None
Devotion:
None
Magic:
These points may NOT be used for arcana

Overview:

General comments. Very few knowledge for either of you, simply because there was so little actually done. Shame to see abandoned threads, but well done on attempting a wrap up!
Story Is what it is, really. It had all the potential to be a fascinating story, but since they didn't actually interact in any way, it's hard to comment further.
Structure Finn: No problems. Alistair: No structure points due to abandoning the thread.

Please do PM me if you think I've missed anything or you have any questions!
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