• Graded • A Leg of Deer

[Pegasus]

Noth

Overview

Oh, Noth, what are you doing!? Oh, don't lie to her! I just.. you write beautifully, your storytelling, character description, ability to paint a story with words is beautiful - exquisite. But hot chocolate fudge sauce and holy rusted metal, Noth-man. I really want the pair of them to have a change, and your knowledge made me sad. The crash of thunder, the approaching storm was a wonderful visual. Beautiful writing.

Points

XP: 15

Loot

None

Knowledge

Deception: Lying About Changing
Deception: Using Closeness to Mask Lies
Deception: Promising Things You Don't Mean

Nightshade Eld

Overview

Nightshade so deserves someone who tells her the truth! I loved how you portrayed Night's tumultuous emotions here and her strength tempered with them. Beautiful writing and particularly good dialogue from Night, I felt like I could hear the emotions in her voice as you wrote her. Lovely writing. If I've missed anything, please drop me a pm.

Points

XP: 15

Loot

None

Knowledge

None

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