New Beginnings

Rynata stumbles across the 1st of Cylus Bonfire

Almund is a thriving township with a dark side. With houses made from the wooden bodies of decommissioned ships, there are many opportunities here, coupled with many dangers.

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Ist of Cylus, Arc 718


"As promised, she's all yours."

The old man's Scalvorian accent is evident through the gruff slur that seeps into the Common he speaks.

It's a calm afternoon at Port Diablo with snow fluttering down at a disturbingly steady pace. At this rate, people will soon have to struggle through the less traversed streets, fighting to make their path in the new snow. It's quite dark as well. With the sun blocked and the heavy snow clouds overhead, Rynata is grateful for the lantern the grizzled man beside her holds. The two of them enter one of the makeshift buildings lining the port; one of the workshops in the shipyard, tasked with fixing and building new crafts. Following the man in as he busies himself in lighting the darkened space, Rynata is left facing a pristine sloop. Newly comissioned from the looks of it. With the door securely shut to keep out the weather, it is strangely quiet. The noise coming from the few people going about their day outside is stifled. The snow does its part to muffle lively noise, but the calm is mostly because those who can have taken their business indoors to escape the bitter cold setting in.

In the pause that follows, Rynata can't help the eager smile that spills across her lips at the sight of her new ship. Her ship. It's a simple enough sloop but to her, the lucky new owner, it's an elegant craft. In the lanternlight, the edges of the wood gleam golden and the darkened shadows accentuate the precise cut of each piece. Her brothers weren't kidding when they told her they knew just the man for the job.

"Thank you! Not that I doubted...but it's more than I hoped for."

Rynata turned to the old shipwright in gratitude, her voice lilting with a strong foreign cadence. She fleetingly thought that he looked tired. Perhaps it was the cold and the dark that was unkind to old bones. Nonetheless, he looked more or less pleased with himself what with the successful business interaction.

"Does that mean you'll be payin' me some extra?" He said wryly, raising a brow in her direction.

"No, but it does mean I know who to look for in this business," Rynata laughed easily. "Why, I could even send people your way."

Groaning in annoyance, the old man stretched his back before grumbling, "If I'm still alive and kickin' by the time you be wanting a new ship, Missy. That is, if you yourself manage to stay out old Vri's way."

The last part, the man said with something akin to a look of pity towards her. Rynata didn't know whether the man thought her naive or knew something she didn't, but she chose to take it as an expression of concern from a bitter old man. It was probably the greatest amount of personal concern he had to offer this day.

"Any advice from the wise old shipwright?"

He frowned at her and the lines in his weathered face deepened, adding to the effect of the surly scowl. "I don't ask questions, but seems to me you're new round these parts. And I ain't about to give sailing tips to a Biqaj, but on land stick to the busy places. The businesses and the docks round these parts. Keep your head down and don't go looking for trouble." The old man nodded to himself, as if satisfied with the basic run-down he had given.

"She doesn't have a name yet, does she?" Rynata said, gesturing to the sloop.

"That's not my problem, is it now," the other sighed even as he halted, raising the lantern higher to give them better light.

"Still, as the creator, wouldn't you like to be present for it? I was thinking The Siren. The Gilded Siren."

"Rather fancy name for a small one dontcha think?"

"You don't like it? I thought it was fitting."

"Like I said. Doesn't concern me. You get what you paid for. Still... I figure it's good enough for a ship of mine."

"The Gilded Siren it is then!" Rynata declared, pleased with the ring the name held even in the brittle air. "It was a pleasure doing business," she added, nodding to the man who grunted in what she hoped was affirmation.

"In that case. I have some last touches to add. Swing by later and we'll get you sorted."

Shooed out into the dusky light spilling from a few points along the dock, Rynata was left to watch the man disappear back into the warmly lit structure. Left to her own devises, she let out a heavy sigh both dreamy and filled with trepidation. Her own ship, small but capable of carrying her wherever she pleased. A symbol of freedom and also, a heavy blow to her wallet. She would need to work hard to repay her family. If she wasn't well off in a years' time, they would probably demand that she return to them. Not out of any spite, of course, but concern for her. It may not be the worst of fates, but Rynata knows that her ego will never let her live down that failure.

Still, if she's to be kept busy throughout the unforgivingly cold season, she might as well celebrate first. Despite everything, her ship is well in order and things look to be going her way. If she's lucky, there must be somewhere lively enough for a special evening. Setting out along the frigid dock, Rynata drew her cloak more firmly to her sides as she spotted a bright flickering light, stark against the dark sea. The wind carried cheery music and raucus laughter. Setting her course for the apparent party, Rynata hurried along to where she hoped she could spend a celebratory evening.
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Following the firelight and rowdy noise, Rynata crossed onto the beach where quite a number of people were gathered. The large bonfire seemed to be roughly at the center of it all and even as she watched, someone tossed in more timber, sending up a swarm of bright sparks. The entire scene was wrapped in a buzz of loud conversation and general merrymaking. Cheery music was being played by a rag tag band and a couple of people were singing along to the tune, drinks in hand. Though some of them were frankly too drunk to be attempting a song, Rynata caught the first few lines of a number that seemed to be unique to the isalnd.

"Upon on Cylus morning!"

Trying to get a sense of what was going on, she waved down a passerby, realizing too late that the man was probably too intoxicated to be of much help.

"What's the big occasion?" she said, raising her voice just a little so that it would carry clearly through all the noise.

" 'S the first of Cylus, lady!" he grinned back at her, swaying dangerously.

In fact, he was so unsteady that Rynata unconsiously readied herself to lend a hand in case he truly started to fall over. Luckily, even as she pondered the meaning of his words, a group of young men paraded out from somewhere in the party. They laughed, pointed out her informant and promptly proceeded to drag him off. Just like that her brief companion disappeared into another corner of the festivities. Trying not to smile too much, Rynata watched them go. It was probably for the best that the man's friends had him and she had likely been spared a night of chaperoning a hopeless party goer. However, from what the man had said, she could gather that this was probably a regular event every Arc.

Walking past the bonfire radiating warmth, Rynata made her way to a makeshift stand selling drinks. People were concentrated here, milling about nursing drinks or seated on benches dragged out for the occasion. Handing over a few coins to the woman behind the stall, Rynata turned back to face the party, leaning against the counter. Now with her own glass of rum in hand, she swayed along absentmindedly to the next few verses of song.

"Yet as the slaves prepared to fight
The Tunawa captain stepped forth with his mace
Even as the guests laughed at his height
He swore valiantly to take the slaves' place!
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From the people gathered near the stand, there was a sudden increase in activity and noise. There were a good few slaps on the back and loud calls for drinks to be prepared. In a surprisingly efficient manner, five people arranged themselves in a small circle on the benches and each were brough a plank of wood supporting several drinks. The assortment of liquor made for a sort of dull rainbow illuminated by the fire light. All of this seemed to be preparations for an elaborate drinking game.

To excited calls of "Walk the plank!", the first contestant downed their first glass to loud cheers. Perched a slight distance away near the counter, Rynata had not expected too much personal involvement in this spontaneous competition. However, when someone sidled up to her she quickly turned towards them, raising her brow expectantly.

The young woman who had approached her had a mischievious grin on her face but seemed friendly enough. She looked as though she could have been younger than her, and her youthful smile did nothing to help Rynata's estimations. Her eyes had a sharp intelligent look that one would perhaps see in crows when they were scheming or playing games.

"Two silver on the tall bloke to the left," she said, gesturing to the man who had just reached for his first drink.

Grinning at the challenge, Rynata took a moment to scan the circle of contestants for her candidate. They all seemed to be sailor types, milling about in the off season. The most likely victor she could see was the burly man whose hair was held back with a bright red bandana. She concluded that he had a confident and nonchalant air about him, as though there was no way he would lose.

"Then my money is on the one with the bandana," she grinned back, taking a sip of her own drink and returning to following the drinking game.

The first and second contestants to drop out went down easily enough. By the fourth drink, the first was teetering on the edge of the bench and as he went to reach for his fifth glass, he slipped forward and onto the table. The second slowly slid down until if there had been a proper table, he would have been under it. The remaining players were both Rynata's and her companion's champions as well as a Biqaj woman, her eyes a tipsy shade of gold and green. Their entourage grew more heated as the game intesified, each of the contestants drunkenly staring each other down. However, Rynata's victory was not to be, as both her champion and the woman surrendered to the victor as a round of drinks was declared in honor of the occasion.

Rynata let out a forlorn sigh and raked a hand through her hair as the gambler beside her let out a small burst of pitying laughter.

"Well, to be fair, that one's a local champion," she said, nodding to the victor who was now surrounded by others toasting his drinking prowess. "Bet you didn't know that."

"No more bets for me tonight," Rynata laughed good naturedly as she dropped two silver nel into the other's outstreched hand. "But am I that obvious?"

"To the trained eye maybe," the woman replied, lightly tapping the sides of her own eyes as she did so. "Wouldn't worry about it too much, though. You'll have that Scalveen air about you in no time."

Grabbing herself her own drink from the stand, the woman gave a smart salute in farewell. "You have a nice evening, now. It was a pleasure doing business."

Rynata's eyes widened at the uncanily familiar phrase, but she returned the gambler's salute and watched her disappear into the party. Perhaps there were more unlucky ducklings that she would triumph over tonight.
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Thread List Up to Date?Yes
Skill Point Ledger Up to Date?Yes
Money Ledger Up to Date?Yes (Made note at end)
Renown Ledger Up to Date?Yes
Solo or Collab?Solo
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Rynata

Skill Points: 10

Knowledges:
  • Skill
    • Linguistics: The Scalveen accent
    • Business Management: Investing in tools of the trade
    • Persuasion: Subtle flattery
    • Singing: Traditional Scalveen song (The Tunawa Captain)
    • Gambling: Placing bets
    • Detection: Recognizing confidence
  • Non-Skill
    • Location: Scalvoris, Almund
    • Location: Scalvoris, Port Diablo
Loot: No. -2SN for her little bet!

Injuries/Overstepping: No.

Renown:

Magic EXP: No.
A simple but enjoyable little thread. I think it's nice that you wrote out the story about Rynata getting her ship and she's certainly an intriguing sort of character. It's evident that she has certain hopes and I'll be interested to see more of her in the future. Be mindful of your tenses. Initially, I thought that you were planning on writing solely in the present, which would have been unusual but there's no rule against it or anything. Present tense writing can add immediacy but then you slipped into the past. Best to watch your consistency. It's a small thing but sometimes those little things can make a big difference. That being said, I quite like your style so it certainly won't stop me from reading more from you in the future!

Just a note that your money ledger has 300GN in the debit section when Rynata is in fact 300GN in debt. You also have 20 nel in the credit section. Based on your total, I assume that you paid that amount off the debt. If you could make that clear, it'd be greatly appreciated. Debit is for money coming in and credit is for money going out.
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